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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap 
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I lingered in your darkened room tonight To listen to you breathing as you slept; And only shadows clothed you from my sight As closer to your sweet repose I crept, To place a gentle kiss upon your brow, Intending only this, and not to stay; But slumbering, you called to me, and now The Fiend could not have tempted me away. I watched the working of your velvet lips, And saw their softness part to speak my name; You gestured then with dreaming fingertips, As though you sought another's hand to claim. I gazed at you in quiet disbelief, And questioning the soundness of my ears, But through my house of doubt there crept the thief Whose name is Hope, to rob me of my fears. I glided close beside your sleeping form, As though admittance to your dream to seek; Your breath upon my skin was gently warm As tendrils of my hair caressed your cheek. With trembling hand, I brushed the wisps aside, Then trailed my fingers softly down your face, While passion born of wanting long denied Electrified the swiftly closing space Between my lips and yours. Your features shone Beneath my gaze, a lover's vision styled More gracefully than any I had known – And as you stirred, and then awoke, I smiled – No longer worried for the consequence, I met your lips before the question came; Without remorse, I cast aside pretense, Well knowing things could never be the same ... Then wakefulness assailed my dreaming eye, And as you slept, I breathed a wistful sigh. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
And I echo that wistful sigh. This is in my opinion one of your most beautiful "felt" poems Kess. Though you rarely fail to amaze me with your pieces, this one stands above the rest. Wow. Chris |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You probably bake better cookies than me too...sigh... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*SIGH* *SIGH* *SIGH* *SIGH* *SIGH* *SIGH* perfection and exquisite poetry take me breath away... me likes when that happens  thats why me reads you... keep em coming me queen of sonnets, me wishes not to breath some more later-lovely-Kess-gator jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Skyfyre, This one has a light of its own. Excellent. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 07-03-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Absolutely beautiful, Kess! One of your best! Choosing your best is far too difficult!  Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You write with a quality that amazes me... |
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~Enigma~ Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 44St Cloud, MN |
The passion of a woman is what holds men's hearts. This kind of passion could be held by none. Brilliant. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Kess, your writing amazes me! I am in awe. Voting for this one!!!!!!  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
It's wonderful the transition from friend to lovers. Very romantic poem. Corinne |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Simply beautiful...pulling a knot in my own stomach... K |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This one works for sure...  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kess~ Just so lovely and passionately penned. Softly seductively alluring. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Kess, you know what I'm going to say. . .this is just superb. . . You always amaze me with your command of the language. . . Just wonderful. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I sighed heavily the first time I read this - am doing so again. You do have a way with words my dear. WOW. Michael |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Wonderful ~H |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
voting for this.....wow....this is so softly beautiful, so well written .....*softly I applaud* |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
liked this a lot ... beautiful images very interesting setting with the sadness of waking to the reality of a dream Rex |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
A beautiful theme and perfectly crafted. I am in awe, once again. Pete |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
A thing of beauty |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Just had to read this one again, so very lovely, Kess! Denise |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Stunning! Beautiful! I love to read you Kess. Voting |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This, Skyfyre, is a masterpiece indeed!!! WOW, what splendid writing... great... regards, sudhir |
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Flower Power Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 29Ottawa, Ontario, Canada |
Oh my God. That's all I have to say. Oh my God. It really stirred something within me....I was hooked after the first line. You have such a gift, it's amazing. I was holding my breath throughout the whole thing. You have my vote for sure on this one! Love, Stephanie Lafleur "Can anything be sadder than work unfinished? Yes: work never begun." ~Christina Rossetti |
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Heather Miller Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409Bryan, Ohio USA |
All I can say is I agree with what everyone else has said!!!!!!!!!! AWSOME!!!!!!!! LITL, Heather With God all things are possible. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
"ditto" the the above comments. you do write on another plane... |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Loved this! |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Skyfyre this is just downright beautiful. You never fail to amaze me with the choice and flow of your words. Wonderful poetry. Got my vote. fh |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Kess, when you pen, there is no equal. Your words seem so effortless. I have none that could compliment you enough. So I'll go with the popular WOW. Parker |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
marvelous poem... great work If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Kess, this is simply beautiful. My heart was truly stirred. Juls |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
It is a beautiful and heartfelt poem. Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
have to go with words stuck in my head.."just beautiful!!!" and the everpresent, "WOW!" wonderful work! dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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