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Sitting in Michael's Lap

0 posted 2000-07-03 03:10 AM

I lingered in your darkened room tonight
To listen to you breathing as you slept;
And only shadows clothed you from my sight
As closer to your sweet repose I crept,
To place a gentle kiss upon your brow,
Intending only this, and not to stay;
But slumbering, you called to me, and now
The Fiend could not have tempted me away.
I watched the working of your velvet lips,
And saw their softness part to speak my name;
You gestured then with dreaming fingertips,
As though you sought another's hand to claim.
I gazed at you in quiet disbelief,
And questioning the soundness of my ears,
But through my house of doubt there crept the thief
Whose name is Hope, to rob me of my fears.
I glided close beside your sleeping form,
As though admittance to your dream to seek;
Your breath upon my skin was gently warm
As tendrils of my hair caressed your cheek.
With trembling hand, I brushed the wisps aside,
Then trailed my fingers softly down your face,
While passion born of wanting long denied
Electrified the swiftly closing space
Between my lips and yours.  Your features shone
Beneath my gaze, a lover's vision styled
More gracefully than any I had known –
And as you stirred, and then awoke, I smiled –
No longer worried for the consequence,
I met your lips before the question came;
Without remorse, I cast aside pretense,
Well knowing things could never be the same ...

Then wakefulness assailed my dreaming eye,
And as you slept, I breathed a wistful sigh.

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Purgatorial Incarceration
1 posted 2000-07-03 03:55 AM

And I echo that wistful sigh. This is in my opinion one of your most beautiful "felt" poems Kess. Though you rarely fail to amaze me with your pieces, this one stands above the rest.



serenity blaze
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2 posted 2000-07-03 04:06 AM

You probably bake better cookies than me too...sigh...
Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-07-03 07:59 AM


perfection and exquisite poetry take me breath away...
me likes when that happens  
thats why me reads you...
keep em coming me queen of sonnets,
me wishes not to breath some more

What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
4 posted 2000-07-03 09:54 AM

This one has a light of its own. Excellent.

[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 07-03-2000).]

Member Seraphic
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5 posted 2000-07-03 05:19 PM

Absolutely beautiful, Kess! One of your best! Choosing your best is far too difficult!  


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6 posted 2000-07-03 06:45 PM

You write with a quality that amazes me...
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St Cloud, MN
7 posted 2000-07-03 06:57 PM

The passion of a woman is what holds men's hearts.  This kind of passion could be held by none.  Brilliant.

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
8 posted 2000-07-03 09:14 PM

Kess, your writing amazes me! I am in awe. Voting for this one!!!!!!  
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state of confusion
9 posted 2000-07-04 12:21 PM

It's wonderful the transition from friend to lovers.  Very romantic poem.


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10 posted 2000-07-04 08:40 PM

Simply beautiful...pulling a knot in my own stomach...


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11 posted 2000-07-04 08:56 PM

This one works for sure...
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12 posted 2000-07-04 10:07 PM

Just so lovely and passionately penned.
Softly seductively alluring.

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

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13 posted 2000-07-04 11:14 PM

     you know what I'm going to say. . .this is just superb. . .

You always amaze me with your command of the language. . .

Just wonderful. . .


That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
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14 posted 2000-07-05 10:20 AM

I sighed heavily the first time I read this - am doing so again.  You do have a way with words my dear.  WOW.


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15 posted 2000-07-06 12:40 PM



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16 posted 2000-07-06 12:54 PM

voting for is so softly beautiful, so well written .....*softly I applaud*
Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
17 posted 2000-07-06 01:02 PM

liked this a lot ... beautiful images
very interesting setting
with the sadness of waking to the reality of a dream


Not A Poet
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18 posted 2000-07-07 09:48 AM

A beautiful theme and perfectly crafted. I am in awe, once again.


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Blue Heaven
19 posted 2000-07-07 11:32 AM

A thing of beauty
Member Seraphic
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20 posted 2000-07-15 08:31 PM

Just had to read this one again, so very lovely, Kess!  


Dark Angel
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21 posted 2000-07-16 01:42 AM

Stunning! Beautiful! I love to read you Kess.

Sudhir Iyer
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22 posted 2000-07-17 08:27 AM

This, Skyfyre, is a masterpiece indeed!!!

WOW, what splendid writing... great...

regards, sudhir

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23 posted 2000-07-27 12:52 PM

Oh my God.  That's all I have to say.  Oh my God.  It really stirred something within me....I was hooked after the first line.  You have such a gift, it's amazing.  I was holding my breath throughout the whole thing.  You have my vote for sure on this one!

Stephanie Lafleur

"Can anything be sadder than work unfinished? Yes: work never begun."
~Christina Rossetti

Heather Miller
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Bryan, Ohio USA
24 posted 2000-07-27 01:01 PM

All I can say is I agree with what everyone else has said!!!!!!!!!! AWSOME!!!!!!!!

With God all things are possible.

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25 posted 2000-07-27 10:43 PM

"ditto" the the above comments.  you do write on another plane...
Member Rara Avis
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26 posted 2000-07-27 11:10 PM

Loved this!
Fred Hobbs
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Tallahassee, Florida, US
27 posted 2000-07-28 02:39 PM

Skyfyre this is just downright beautiful.  You never fail to amaze me with the choice and flow of your words.  Wonderful poetry. Got my vote.


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28 posted 2000-07-28 04:38 PM

Kess, when you pen, there is no equal. Your words seem so effortless. I have none that could compliment you enough. So I'll go with the popular WOW.


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29 posted 2000-07-29 04:42 PM

marvelous poem...
great work

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

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30 posted 2000-07-29 06:02 PM

Kess, this is simply beautiful. My heart was truly stirred.    Juls
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31 posted 2000-07-29 10:50 PM

It is a beautiful and heartfelt poem.


Why ME???

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32 posted 2000-08-07 03:24 PM

have to go with words stuck in my head.."just beautiful!!!"  and the everpresent, "WOW!"  

wonderful work!


"Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you."
-Kahlil Gibran

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