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Martie
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0 posted 2000-06-29 11:56 PM



For my husband, Taylor, with love


   Wild Sweet Ride


Winding was that road dear
when we let our hair fly
and I capped the soaring fabric
and you grew shaggy
and we stopped and fished
and then ate grilled trout
and it rained almonds
and sealed onions in foil
perfumed the room.

We honeyed with the moon
and sat naked on the porch
and listened to the river
where forever played a tune
and entwined our hearts with love songs
so sweet that to this day I can taste
you in the tune and bring back
when I bent over the rail
and hung my hair wet and unclothed
into the sweet pine of the air
and you said that there was gold there
and I just smiled

Then you took my picture
and I took yours
drenched in a field of scotch broom
and you brought me wild flowers for the table
and so we began this wild sweet ride.

And now twenty years have passed
and you sigh me into the morning again love,
and I am fluted and full of light
and breathe this smile of day
for you to turn and watch.

There is delicious life
on these pillows that merge
and the shape of your head
is engraved there,
this softness were my heart turns
is still warm.

I have curved with you
into these years
and watched time changing,
each day’s passing
to shadow, crease
and color that tell me
I am fragile
and no longer new.

But you hand me your
warm words that see me
still in bright love’s glow,
and after time has drifted
past and bathed my skin
I think that maybe I am
as lovely as your vision
for you would not say so
if dearest love
had not made it true.


© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 2000-06-30 12:07 PM


Awesome!!..
Romy
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2 posted 2000-06-30 09:35 AM


Martie, I loved this!  It reminds me of my own relationship with my husband!  I especially liked these stanzas.

There is delicious life
on these pillows that merge
and the shape of your head
is engraved there,
this softness were my heart turns
is still warm.

I have curved with you
into these years
and watched time changing,
each day’s passing
to shadow, crease
and color that tell me
I am fragile
and no longer new.

So beautiful...you have my vote!
Debbie


Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-06-30 02:46 PM


Great story written in poetry!
~~wonderfully done~~


A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.


Mike
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Posts 2462

4 posted 2000-06-30 03:03 PM


A truly special poem for a special relationship.  Very nicely written Martie.
Di
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 19
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 2000-06-30 03:28 PM


Your love story reminds me not to
give up hope. Some people do stay
happy together. I can't wait!!!:  
You're love shines through.

~People shine from the inside out~

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-06-30 05:49 PM


I got goosebumps the first time i read
this amazing poem and it just happened
again...
this is absolute poetic perfection
from conception to completion.
you just simply awe the h*** out of me  
we wont even discuss my envy of the poem--
or the marriage that inspired it  
love ya
jm


What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly
~LaoTzeTao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 2000-06-30 06:27 PM


I remember this one well. As I recall it spawned some remarkable au natural comments from Rosemary. Anyway, it gets a vote
Liz

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8 posted 2000-06-30 09:10 PM


Wonderful, Martie~
So pleased to see you submit it.
I'll bet Taylor is too.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Martie
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9 posted 2000-07-01 11:07 AM


Nan--awesome from you means alot to me.

Debbie--I'm glad to hear you have such a relationship too...thanks so much for thinking it beautiful.

Danny--This is the beginning and the present...there is alot in between...thanks for such a nice comment.

Mike--your special replies always mean alot to me.

Di--yes, some people do...with a little luck and alot of that what Nan says...give, give.

JM--Your enthusiasm makes me smile.

Liz--yes Rosemary and Dale were downstream building a damn.

Marge--yes, Taylor was glad that I did...thanks sweet sister.

Poet deVine
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10 posted 2000-07-01 11:40 AM


Ah yes!! I remember this one Martie. Voting!  
Denise
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11 posted 2000-07-01 09:55 PM


Awesome indeed!  

Denise

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12 posted 2000-07-01 11:38 PM


This one I remember well, Martie. It's the one that made me envy your husband to death I love it...
Kit McCallum
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13 posted 2000-07-24 12:19 PM


Such a wonderful and tender love you've described so beautifully Martie ... splendid poem!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Martie
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14 posted 2000-07-24 02:05 PM


PdV--Thanks for remembering and for the vote..it is a special poem to me.

Denise--thanks for the awesome.

Balladeer--You make me blush, you sweet man.

Kit--thank you so much for bringing this back up and for your kind words.

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