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Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
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0 posted 2000-06-27 07:22 PM





Alone of you
    I am the thorn
       behind the rose
     you have touched me
          and bled from me
       but the rose
         has only caressed you
                 with its beauty,
            its charm,
            with the corners
         of its mouth turned
                 up, wide
    it has not kissed
        your skin
as I have.



Dark Angel
2000


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Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive,
my body goes on, my spirit has died,
and I though alive, feel dead inside.

"Rose Petal"



[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 06-27-2000).]

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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
1 posted 2000-06-27 08:24 PM


Beautiful, DA!!! I really like this one.  
Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2000-06-27 09:22 PM


DarkAngel~
You romantic little thing you !
I like it.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Parker
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since 2000-01-06
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ON
3 posted 2000-06-27 09:38 PM


Dark, very romantic, love the last line...  

Parker

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
4 posted 2000-06-28 12:00 PM


I am substance,, you are flash
really lovely dark angel
jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

5 posted 2000-06-28 02:31 AM


I remember this one girlie...

lovely!

K

Moonshine
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since 1999-10-01
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6 posted 2000-06-29 01:36 AM


Truly awesome poem M - you may be as sharp (in wit) as the thorn, but your inner beauty is that of the rose. Well done.
"voted"

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
7 posted 2000-06-29 01:47 AM


It is wonderful isn't it Moonshine?
A wonderful economy with words that speak volumes.
jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)
8 posted 2000-06-29 02:12 AM


hehehe i had a thought but i wont say it i wont! yuh anyways oman i likes it!
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
9 posted 2000-06-30 04:44 PM


Soft and smoothe... like's it much!  
Sven
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10 posted 2000-07-01 12:31 PM


Wonderful DA. . . simply romantic and seductive at the same time. . .

Superb. . .

-----------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

11 posted 2000-07-02 10:47 AM


Sharon, thanks so much honey  

Margey, umm romantic me!!  nope me don't think so   Thanks for your lovely reply  

Haleyja, thank you yep I like the last line too  

Jamie, thanks sweetie  

Kamla, thank you sweet butterfly!  

Oh J you say such sweet things about me heheh  full knowing that they arent true   HAHAHA    kidding honey, seriously thanks so much  

Hey Walt, C'mon you can tell me!!  Thanks hon glad you liked it  

Christopher, soft and smooth hey?  just like the rose in this poem   Thanks for your reply  

Sven, thanks my friend   glad you liked  





Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive,
my body goes on, my spirit has died,
and I though alive, feel dead inside.

"Rose Petal"


Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
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state of confusion
12 posted 2000-07-02 11:42 AM


This is darkly beautiful, I like!

Corinne

Poertree
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13 posted 2000-07-03 05:00 PM


nope THIS is my fav .....

beautiful and sad M

P

Dark Angel
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14 posted 2000-07-08 12:21 PM


Corrine, thanks so much  

Awwww shucks MP, thanks so much my kind friend  

Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive,
my body goes on, my spirit has died
and I though alive, feel dead inside.

"Rose Petal"

redheart angrybraids
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since 2000-04-16
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15 posted 2000-07-08 01:29 AM


this is so exuisite,  i realy enjoy your writing, it's so transparent.


Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

redheart angrybraids
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16 posted 2000-07-08 01:29 AM


this is so exuisite,  i realy enjoy your writing, it's so transparent.


Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
17 posted 2000-07-08 01:46 AM


feel beauty of a rose
very nice

Geoffrey Sonnen
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18 posted 2000-07-09 10:06 PM


Very nice, Miss Dark Angel. I really like your creativity not only in word, but in presentation. That was a cool idea to arrange your words in a floral design in red. Peace, Geoff
AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
19 posted 2000-07-09 10:44 PM


this was beautiful...
and i have to agree that the presentation is an awesome idea...
lovely work

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
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20 posted 2000-07-10 05:38 AM


Oh Little one this is superbly written...well done
Love Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Marsha
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21 posted 2000-07-10 05:56 AM


You speak as one with the broken hearted, there is life after love, it's just not so much fun.
Take care

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
22 posted 2000-07-10 09:34 PM


DA,

Wow, love this one.  So romantic!!!  Just have to vote!!  

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
23 posted 2000-08-05 08:53 PM


This one deserves another look.



Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
24 posted 2000-08-05 11:49 PM


"with the corners
         of its mouth turned
                 up, wide
    it has not kissed
        your skin
as I have."

great one DARK!  love the last bit the best!!  but all of it is wonderful  

dg




"Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you."
-Kahlil Gibran


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