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Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
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0 posted 2000-06-27 07:00 PM


she flowed out of the car
one smooth leg after the other
with liquidity and grace
her sex appeal dripped
from head to toe
as she poured
across the concrete
at the crook of her finger
men splash at her knees
spewing words of undying love
begging for just one drip
and I look down
at my jeans
and comfortable shoes
and suddenly I don't feel...
wet enough


[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 06-27-2000).]

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doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
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1 posted 2000-06-27 07:09 PM


geez... you've done it again!!! you wrote a fabulous poem and forgot to check the submit button... do you have as much problem as i do submitting?

it's been raining a lot here... no drought this summer like last

great poem, corazon... i know i've read this before... or maybe i wrote it? LOL... i wish....

come back and check submit and i'm back to vote..! *wink*

Corazon
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Posts 1209

2 posted 2000-06-27 07:13 PM


lol, thanks doreen...will claim lack of sleep....but we both know how old I am, so I won't claim it too loudly  
thanks  

doreen peri
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3 posted 2000-06-27 07:23 PM


whaddya talkin' about? i don't know anything about you... hehe

matter of fact, from what i heard, your frigging ageless, just like me!  

vote's in!

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

4 posted 2000-06-27 07:27 PM


Hey this is Great! Wow, enjoyed the read.  
voting!  

Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive,
my body goes on, my spirit has died,
and I though alive, feel dead inside.

"Rose Petal"


Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

5 posted 2000-06-27 08:06 PM


and suddenly I don't feel...
wet enough
---------------
Welcome to my world  
hon, I've spent my whole life in a dry spell...
excellent poem...
later,
jm

HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 964
Canada
6 posted 2000-06-27 08:13 PM


A very well done peom, loved it

The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Parker
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129
ON
7 posted 2000-06-27 09:19 PM


Well the title got me girl, and I'm kinda curious on how you propose to get wetter...need help...lol
i'll just drip this one into the vote box.

Parker

Marge Tindal
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8 posted 2000-06-27 09:34 PM


Corazon~
How well I remember this one !
Wonderful images spring off the page.
Good choice.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com



Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

9 posted 2000-06-28 09:54 AM


thanks all, and thank doreen for catching my booboo before I left for the day  

and haleyja...lol...help at getting wetter? oh my my *blushing at the thought*
rofg...

Not A Poet
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA
10 posted 2000-06-28 11:53 AM


I don't feel wet enough either after reading this   but it was great anyway.

Thanks,
Pete

SEA
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with you
11 posted 2000-06-29 10:59 PM


Corazon~ I can't vote enough for this one..... this is definately my favorite in here......I printed it! This is me all the way (sadly, the one not wet enough)    **********VOTE*********   -SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB



Balladeer
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12 posted 2000-06-29 11:32 PM


It doesn't get any wetter than this!   Vote's in....
Martie
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13 posted 2000-06-30 12:02 PM


Just perfect, and the end...super! Voting!
Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

14 posted 2000-07-03 09:22 AM


thanks all, and lol@SEA, yep, that feeling is universal i guess....
   thanks again

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