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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Sweet innocent face, Staring up at mine, Cheekiest grin, Bright eyes that shine, But something is wrong, Something that she can't see, And she's searching for answers, Answers from me, " Why am I so tired?" I can't explain, " Why do I feel so bad?" God, please stop her pain, I want to take her in my arms, And to my breast hold her tight, But the final glimmer of hope, I am losing sight, For the white coats say, Her end is coming near, That her life light is fading, And will cease to flicker within the year, I can't let this happen, To this angel of mine, I need to find something, God, help me to extend her time, If that means that I, Must sacrifice my life, In an instant I will, And I shall take away the knife, The sharpness that is severing, Her thin thread of hope, In the dark void of pain, Her tiny hands fruitlessly grope, For something to hold onto, Something she doesn't know what, Perhaps an answer to grasp? Her unrelenting pain to stop? Sweet innocent face, Staring up at mine, A pale, faded grin, Eyes that used shine, " Where is your smile?" she asks, " And why are you crying?" My love just isn't enough, To stop my baby from dying. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
OMG!!! Now that is what I call EXCELLENCE m'friend  All my love, Jeffrey |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
OMG again, moonshine. This one is just as good as the last one of yours I just read. Oozes pain and love. Linda M. |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Thanx for your lovely reply and comment Jeffrey - I am glad you enjoyed it. Thanx for your lovely reply and comment Linda. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Wow, what an emotional poem.. is this from real experiences?? So desperate, loving.. *voted* Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Very poignant and emotion evoking piece. I only hope to God it isn't personal. God Bless Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
You my dear J are such a loving and caring person! This is so full of love. "voted" *hugs* Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Yu Lan, Promentheus: thanx for your lovely replies. No, this is not my own personal experience ( as I have no children yet lol), but it is my reaction to things I have experienced on clinical prac ( I am a student nurse at university - will be finished this year!)My reflection of what the mother ( of a child I was caring for) was going through. [This message has been edited by Moonshine (edited 06-29-2000).] |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Thanx for your lovely reply and comment M, it means so much to me You too are a very loving and caring soul too! (((((((hugebighuggs))))))) |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
excellent work... great poem |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Thanx for your lovely reply and comment Avanti |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Moonshine, This is a powerful piece of work, very well done. Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah, there is so much pain in this... yet it speaks in the most caring way... all in all an excellent poem.... regards, sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Thanx for your lovely reply and comment Cerenity |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
This is incredibly powerful and heartwrenching...you've brought tears to my eyes. Exellent work, I'm voting! *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Such an awesome experience. Very well described. Pete |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
well written poetry. add a vote for an excellent poem. |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Thanx Krista, Pete and Mike for your lovely replies and comments - I appreciate them heaps Moonshine. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
'Bout near brought tears to these blue eyes! |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
your title caught my eye...your poem touched my heart...thanks for the great read.. "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Hey there Christopher and Majestic! Thanx for reading and replying to my poem - I am glad that you both enjoyed it. Moonshine. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is pure excellent work..smooth and deeply touching...just wonderful!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Geez I forgot to vote..I do that all the time .................CLICK!..................... |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
this is heart-wrenching..  i can only imagine how that mother must feel..i'm so thankful for a healthy child--i know i sometimes take it for granted that she'll always be ok..great work writing this.. dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Thanx Ethome and dgvarner for readin my poem and also for your lovely replies - I am glad that you enjoyed my poem. Moonshine. |
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