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HelmutB
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0 posted 2000-06-25 02:12 AM


I thought that I could write.

I thought that I could write
A piece of poetry
The best I ever tried

Words where are they when I'm in need
Some don't come to me
And others yet incise so deep

I tried to write about your beauty
But lost in your eyes
My words could not fill this duty

I tried to write about your tenderness
But lost in your hands
My lines weren't blessed

I tried to write about your charm
But lingering there
I was lost in your arm

I tried to write about your love I feel
But drowned in your soul
No words seemed real

I tried to write about my love
But with bleeding heart
How could I begin my dove?

I tried to write about the way you sing
But lost in your song
I just stared at your ring

I tried, but failed so miserably
To write a piece of poetry
Describing the love between you and me

But the best I ever tried,
was to hold your hand
The day you died

© Copyright 2000 Helmut Becker - All Rights Reserved
Christopher J
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1 posted 2000-06-25 02:18 AM


This poem touched me deep inside..it is so sad, i loved the rhyme and the words...they will stay with me forever...everytime i look at the girl i love, i will think of your words.. you have touched me!  Good job.
Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-06-25 02:38 AM


this is the most beautiful "failure"
I've ever read ...
thank you for touching me with this poem.
jm

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3 posted 2000-06-25 09:59 AM


Helmut, this is very sad. I could feel the heartache all the way through the poem.
Meadowmuse
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4 posted 2000-06-25 10:48 AM


Helmut, to hold another so dear, whether in one's thoughts or in one's arms, is a thing of tenderness, of beauty and of honesty. You have held and have been held, in this way...and you have not failed.
L. and S. P.
Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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5 posted 2000-06-25 11:49 AM


Helmut, my friend~
Such a tenderly written piece from your heart.
You're amazing, my gentle friend.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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HelmutB
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6 posted 2000-06-26 04:58 PM


Do to time constrained I have to summerize the reply to you
"Thank you so much for your much appricaited notes". May all your day's be filled with happyness


The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
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7 posted 2000-06-27 05:07 AM


Helmut, this is so sad and so beautiful.

Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive,
my body goes on, my spirit has died,
and I though alive, feel dead inside.

"Rose Petal"


Jamie
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8 posted 2000-06-27 05:24 AM


Don't look now but trying led to doing.
Nice Poem.

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



HelmutB
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9 posted 2000-06-27 08:02 PM


Dark Angel
Tahnk you for your reply. It's sad yes, but it also shows that it was beutiful. I really liked this signature.  
"Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive,
my body goes on, my spirit has died,
and I though alive, feel dead inside."
"Rose Petal"



Prometheus
Wise words you have replied, and thank you for your comment
"Don't look now but trying led to doing."



The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Martie
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10 posted 2000-06-27 09:19 PM


Helmut--your heart is beautiful, as is this poem.
Sunshine
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11 posted 2000-06-27 09:23 PM


Helmut my friend, you snuck this in...I'm so glad it is here.  You knew you'd get a thumbs up from me!

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


HelmutB
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12 posted 2000-06-29 12:45 PM


Martie
Thank you so much, you made my heart sing.

Sunshine
A thumbs up from you is like the Sun going up for me.


The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Danny Holloway
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13 posted 2000-07-05 12:51 PM


Liked this piece a lot.  Excellent expression thoughtout.  Words are only the vehicle used to convey feelings and emotion. I think you used them well with this poem.
dh

A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.



Sunshine
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14 posted 2000-07-05 01:57 PM


Perhaps, yes, two thumbs up...

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
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15 posted 2000-07-06 12:05 PM


Oh man you captured my heart with this one and pulled the strings of tears! Excellent!
tracie66
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16 posted 2000-07-06 06:18 AM


Such a sad ending Helmut...I felt such love and beauty in this piece and thank you so much for sharing this with us and hopefully with alot of other poeple as well...casting my vote now  
Love Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Nan
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17 posted 2000-07-06 06:56 AM


Very beautifully done, my friend..*V
HelmutB
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18 posted 2000-07-06 07:26 PM


Sunshine
Perhaps, yes, two SUNS up...   Thank you my friend.

WhtDove
Also to you a heart felt thank you.

tracie66
As they say "All good things must come to an end" but the memories are kept inside my heart. Thank you for your kind words
Love Helmut

Nan
Danke schoen my friend for your *V and reading my bad english  

The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Denise
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19 posted 2000-07-07 08:21 PM


Sometimes the words escape us when we most need them. This is very touching Helmut.

Denise

HelmutB
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20 posted 2000-07-11 11:17 AM


Thank you denise for your reply.
Words can say so much, and yours do.

The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


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