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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I thought that I could write. I thought that I could write A piece of poetry The best I ever tried Words where are they when I'm in need Some don't come to me And others yet incise so deep I tried to write about your beauty But lost in your eyes My words could not fill this duty I tried to write about your tenderness But lost in your hands My lines weren't blessed I tried to write about your charm But lingering there I was lost in your arm I tried to write about your love I feel But drowned in your soul No words seemed real I tried to write about my love But with bleeding heart How could I begin my dove? I tried to write about the way you sing But lost in your song I just stared at your ring I tried, but failed so miserably To write a piece of poetry Describing the love between you and me But the best I ever tried, was to hold your hand The day you died |
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Christopher J Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 94 |
This poem touched me deep inside..it is so sad, i loved the rhyme and the words...they will stay with me forever...everytime i look at the girl i love, i will think of your words.. you have touched me! Good job. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is the most beautiful "failure" I've ever read ... thank you for touching me with this poem. jm |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Helmut, this is very sad. I could feel the heartache all the way through the poem. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Helmut, to hold another so dear, whether in one's thoughts or in one's arms, is a thing of tenderness, of beauty and of honesty. You have held and have been held, in this way...and you have not failed. L. and S. P. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Helmut, my friend~ Such a tenderly written piece from your heart. You're amazing, my gentle friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Do to time constrained I have to summerize the reply to you "Thank you so much for your much appricaited notes". May all your day's be filled with happyness The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Helmut, this is so sad and so beautiful. Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Don't look now but trying led to doing. Nice Poem. Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Dark Angel Tahnk you for your reply. It's sad yes, but it also shows that it was beutiful. I really liked this signature. "Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside." "Rose Petal" Prometheus Wise words you have replied, and thank you for your comment "Don't look now but trying led to doing." The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Helmut--your heart is beautiful, as is this poem. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Helmut my friend, you snuck this in...I'm so glad it is here. You knew you'd get a thumbs up from me! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Martie Thank you so much, you made my heart sing. Sunshine A thumbs up from you is like the Sun going up for me. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Liked this piece a lot. Excellent expression thoughtout. Words are only the vehicle used to convey feelings and emotion. I think you used them well with this poem. dh A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Perhaps, yes, two thumbs up... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Oh man you captured my heart with this one and pulled the strings of tears! Excellent! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Such a sad ending Helmut...I felt such love and beauty in this piece and thank you so much for sharing this with us and hopefully with alot of other poeple as well...casting my vote now  Love Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very beautifully done, my friend..*V |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Sunshine Perhaps, yes, two SUNS up... Thank you my friend.WhtDove Also to you a heart felt thank you. tracie66 As they say "All good things must come to an end" but the memories are kept inside my heart. Thank you for your kind words Love Helmut Nan Danke schoen my friend for your *V and reading my bad english The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sometimes the words escape us when we most need them. This is very touching Helmut. Denise |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Thank you denise for your reply. Words can say so much, and yours do. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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