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since 2000-04-11
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Tallahassee, Florida

0 posted 2000-06-21 06:18 PM

I thought if I listened to him,
I would also be heard.

I thought if i was there for him,
I would prove myself loyal.

I thought if I shared my heart,
He wouldn't punch through
Yet another gaping hole.

Shows you what I know.
Standing here with my Swiss cheese


A woman to a man is
But a mere chapter,
But a man to a woman
Is an entire book.--
Kynder Howell

© Copyright 2000 Kynder - All Rights Reserved
Dawn Eclipse
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The Horsehead Nebula
1 posted 2000-06-21 08:39 PM

Such a sad poem... but wonderfully done.     Great job.

"Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

*Cassandra Roseen*

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since 1999-06-05
Posts 596
Callington, Cornwall, England
2 posted 2000-06-22 07:13 AM

Kynder, this is great! Very powerful message and the "swiss cheese soul" really drives the message home at the end.


"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

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since 1999-11-03
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3 posted 2000-06-22 10:16 AM

Such a sad image but very well written. I also particularly like the "swiss cheese soul" line. Thanks.


Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
4 posted 2000-06-22 10:43 AM

This goes to prove what 'thought' did
I like this poem

X Angel
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5 posted 2000-06-24 05:36 PM

This was a great poem....I like very much the swiss cheese soul line....but over here we have a brand of cheddar...Tillamook Cheese Factory Cheddar, I think you'd be better off switching to cheddar...

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6 posted 2000-07-01 06:50 PM

Really enjoyed this. Your humor -- even at a lousy situation -- shines through.


since 2000-05-12
Posts 367

7 posted 2000-07-01 10:29 PM

Great poem.

Want me to rap him upside the head
for you?  

When you get out of this situation...remember he was
a tiny little man with a tiny
little brain and God knows
what to do with little men
like that!


~My Skipper Jim
I love you!
Your Lady June~

serenity blaze
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8 posted 2000-07-13 03:11 PM

Great job with this...I love it.
Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
9 posted 2000-07-14 10:08 AM

A nice image for a strong heartfelt poem...

Good work kynder

regards, sudhir

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10 posted 2000-07-15 09:31 AM

enjoyed your poem.. nicely written.
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11 posted 2000-07-16 09:20 AM

Wonderful, especially liked the "swiss cheese soul."
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