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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2000-06-21 03:41 PM

Alone At Last

Left alone at last my love,
you hold my hand so tight.
The doctor gave his last report,
I've lost this mortal fight.

I feel my life slipping away;
see that truth in your eyes.
You watch me with such tenderness
to count my breathless sighs.

The last few months has made me glad,
to leave this cancerous place.
And the last thing I want to see in this life
is your sweet and smiling face.

With a moan I take my last breath
my eyes tell you it is so
and closing
in this

I watch you

[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 06-21-2000).]

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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2000-06-21 03:51 PM

Oh boy ... tears starting here Poet deVine! Beautiful sentiments, and the format trailing off at the end makes such a dramatic and emotional closing.  Crying and clicking now ... (loved it)

Best wishes,

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 06-21-2000).]

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since 2000-02-14
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2 posted 2000-06-21 04:16 PM

Fantastic PDV....


Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

Not A Poet
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA
3 posted 2000-06-21 04:47 PM

Yes, a heart touching sentiment. And the format, trailing off at the end does add a great deal. Thanks.


Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
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Purgatorial Incarceration
4 posted 2000-06-21 05:05 PM




The way you trailed the words off at the end... wow. I'm struck speechless. I may even have a tear rolling down my face.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
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5 posted 2000-06-21 05:18 PM

Wow Sharon very touching and sad poem, but beautiful!!  loved it

My grief lies onward and my joy behind

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
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6 posted 2000-06-21 10:04 PM

sniff, sniff...Oh man, rips at the heart strings it does!  Sad, but so well written and touching!
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since 1999-06-05
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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
7 posted 2000-06-21 10:06 PM

Beautiful, deVine one.

In order to keep a true perspective of one's importance, everyone should have a dog that will worship him and a cat that will ignore him.

serenity blaze
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8 posted 2000-06-21 10:08 PM

Janet Marie
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9 posted 2000-06-21 10:10 PM

*ditto sigh*

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10 posted 2000-06-21 10:22 PM

Oh PDV, this brought tears to my eyes. It must be in our book!

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

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11 posted 2000-06-21 11:39 PM

I enjoyed it! A vivid portrait of a lover's last touch. Sob...

Bob <><

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12 posted 2000-06-22 12:02 PM

Very touching and well written, Sharon.


Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
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St. Paul, MN
13 posted 2000-06-22 12:39 PM

*hushed silence* Wow.. great poem Sharon.. the tightening format matches the tightness in my throat..

Abrahm Simons

"Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
14 posted 2000-06-22 12:49 PM

I think there are many people that need to read this ...
very sad and touching memories

Novacaine For The Soul
since 2000-05-26
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New Orleans
15 posted 2000-06-22 12:50 PM

*sniffle* it seems that you've uncovered the most sentimental of all my fearful thoughts... that of leaving the one i love and seeing the tears in her eyes... stirring and beautifully melancholy... just what i love in poetry...

a sad tomato

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16 posted 2000-06-22 02:18 AM

I can't see the screen through the blur, thank goodness for tissues (and that I don't have to look when I type   )

Wow, Sharon..

ellie LeJeune
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17 posted 2000-06-22 02:19 AM

sharon; you are so gifted! This poem is alive with the sadness of deaths goodbye. Ellie
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Callington, Cornwall, England
18 posted 2000-06-22 09:05 AM

Uh, Kleenex please! WOW!


"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

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Listening to every heart
19 posted 2000-06-22 09:39 AM

of course, it could only come from you...


~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

Jeffrey Carter
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State of constant confusion!
20 posted 2000-06-22 09:54 PM

I don't mind at all telling I voted for this masterpiece!

All my love,

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

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New York, USA
21 posted 2000-06-22 10:37 PM

PdV - Wow...This is such an incredible poem.  As I've just come in from saying my last goodbyes to a dear friend, the tears are flowing freely.  This is just so beautiful.  Bonnie
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22 posted 2000-06-26 02:12 PM

Wonderfully written.  Another exceptional poem.
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23 posted 2000-06-28 11:32 AM

Hi Poet deVine,

This is sad, but I do beleive its very well true how someone could feel this way. Wonderful and powerful writting, thank you for sharing.

Love,  Cerenity

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24 posted 2000-06-29 12:16 PM

This is simply wonderful. . . goes through a lot of emotions. . . only you could make it this way. . .

Superb. . .


That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
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Tulsa, OK
25 posted 2000-06-30 03:30 PM

.......silent with words stuck in my throat!
beautifully written.

A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
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Forever In Your Heart
26 posted 2000-07-01 05:00 PM

My mom HAD breast cancer, and the thought of her death had always crossed my mind, but now through Gods healing she no longer has cancer!
But I pray and feel for all those who have lost a loved one like this and who will loose one, this poem reflects those last few minutes of life! sad but lovely poem!

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27 posted 2000-08-07 03:29 PM

wow..."i watch you let me go..."  you just broke my heart...

beautifully written..


"Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you."
-Kahlil Gibran

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28 posted 2000-08-07 06:02 PM

        This is really


Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

since 2000-05-06
Posts 210
Waukesha, WI USA
29 posted 2000-08-07 09:42 PM

I'm speechless... this was so touching and brought tears to my eyes.  Wonderful writing PD...just wonderful.


You can give without loving but you cannot love without giving
There is no danger of developing eye-strain from looking on the bright side of things

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