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My Soul's Behest
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My Soul's Behest |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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If in truth, justice unfold, remember blackened night of soul... Recall, I stood, before you, bold-- shameless amid stories told. A bullet--silvered-- in my chest... fingers' dance... dew--kiss--wept... And no I cannot, will not rest-- Take what you need, forget the rest... This is my will, my soul's behest... cherish-- less forgetfulness... memory wrapped in my own greed... a thought of whisper... whispers "me..." and now I feel the pain of need. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Powerful medicine you have here, Serenity. I especially liked the ending lines: "a thought of whisper... whispers "me..." and now I feel the pain of need." |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Serenity,...Now this one I would love to hear read aloud by you. Honestly. It just has this uummph behind it and your words,....soOo impressed here. I really enjoy reading your work...and this here piece just proves why it's so worth the while. Take care Sista! *Peace. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Alicat--fine line between powerful medicine and poison...but I will take that as a compliment...I thank you much, m'friend... Spitfire--sighs...I cannot read aloud...lol...I always cry....but thank you much, and much peace go with you, lovely love to you. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
superb serenity. . . this is you all over. . . it speaks from your heart. . . wonderful. . . -------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Fabulous flavor in this one, serenity. I like it.... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Powerful stuff here Serenity....."the pain of need".....you took my breath away! Great writing!! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Aaahhh! O Serene One! Wherefrom? Wherefrom, may I ask that you evoke such emotions swirling within thyself? Wherefrom, may I ask do you shower peace and tranquil and yet emote powerful feelings? such as these... ----------------- memory wrapped in my own greed... a thought of whisper... whispers "me..." and now I feel the pain of need. ---------- My regards, sudhir |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Serinity...I most certainly hope you are getting some of these poems out to publishers!!! Your writing has matured to the point where you can hold a candle to anyone I've read and probably dim their lights with yours. Great work  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
wow...If you guys keep being this nice to me I'll get so happy I'll develop writer's block...and hoot, that's the nicest thing anyone has ever said to me...well, regarding my writing anyway...grins....thank you all so much...Gawd I love this place!!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenity - the power behind this is wonderful! I must ditto Ruth's comments... now I have yet another favorite of yours to come back to! Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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