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I've learned life the harsh way...
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I've learned life the harsh way... |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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I've learned life the harsh way-- Reclining-- my feet on the table, There were sparks in the ashtray But I just wasn't able To warm up the others Though I loved them with ardor All men were my brothers But sometimes I would start to Doubt my purpose "What if I wasn't much like Him?" That alone made me nervous The thought was so frightening I planned my own crucifixion But ended up with a graveyard I was seeking affliction And becoming afraid that I would find just pleasure The world's so unjust! And under this pressure, I was turning to dust. Love made me vomit, from friendships I suffered And I knew no escape Like a lost moth I hovered I had no definite shape- No identity, I existed only In the mirror of sadness and grieving And when I couldn't get any more lonely I started living... Check out my poetry here: http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Master.... There are some powerful thoughts here!! I like the line where love makes you vomit, because there is a whole lot of truth to that..... Good to see that you did start to live in the end!! Enjoyed the write!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you Sunny, I'm glad you liked it! Check out my poetry here: http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoyed this piece, and especially admired its imaginative rhythm and rhyme scheme. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thanks Claire, I got the rhyme scheme and meter from reading poetry of J. Brodsky, it's pretty fun to play around with... |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow, Master! You're poetry has certainly caught my attention and from the looks of it..you're a very talented poet in your own right. This piece is very powerful and sad. Great piece and thanks for sharing. Nathan |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Nate Dogg, Thank you for your kind response... I'm glad you liked my poetry and again thank you for responding! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Most of us learn the same way, Master. Great writing! Denise |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh Master, do I like this....the ending lines got to me, most especially....my theme song for the night...I thank you... |
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