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Open Poetry #9

Bring The Rain

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

0 posted 2000-08-13 01:41 AM

...
And the rains come
watering the dry arid land.
They wash away the forgotten bones,
and they wash away the forgotten sins.

I once was forgotten,
or maybe just mistaken.
It’s hard to say right now just
which one it might have been.

OH! BUT HAVE NO FEAR MY FRIENDS,

I found salvation in the television
on that lovely channel animal planit.
Yes, those animals live free,
those animals live without sin.

I’m not so sure just
how I was remembered.
Consciousness has only recently
been a factor in my dreams.

BUT I HAVE THE GIFT OF CREATIVE INTERPRITATION,

Leaving me, unavoidably with
imperceptible, imperishable impurities.
I can’t forget anything,
I can’t forget those bones.

So bring it down on me
wash me away like the dust!
Take these visions from my eyes,
bring the rain.

THEN AGAIN, MAYBE I’VE JUST BEEN MISTAKEN.

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Just an effigy to be disgraced,
to be defaced.
Your need for me has been replaced.

[This message has been edited by Effigy (edited 08-13-2000).]

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2000-08-14 07:48 PM

Whichever it is..... you have penned a fine work here...take care...ethome.

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

2 posted 2000-08-15 10:13 PM

"...CREATIVE INTERPRITATION"

...you certainly have. Enjoyed reading this.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

forne_marin
Member

since 2004-04-13

Posts 140
Spartanburg, South Carolina

3 posted 2004-04-16 12:32 PM

".../And the rains come" What a beautiful beginning. "I was once forgotten, or maybe just mistaken." Heh. Very Very nice. "I found salvation in the television/on that lovely channel animal planit" WHOOAH. Nice. (but, ah, it's PLANET). You also mispelled interpretation. Nice read, nice rhythm, strikingly beautiful images.

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