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Ray of light
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Ray of light |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Darkness has wrapped around my heart, with the tenacity of a lion. Failure has struck me like a dart and my heart's to the point of dying. I've withered in my pitfall and chatised myself for my errors. I swear that I gave my all, in hopes of a life that was fairer. I've looked into the mirror and seen a black curse. I've entered upon terror, like Satan in church. I've wondered when my ill-fates, will be reversed to happiness. I've took all that I could take, to the fervent tune of crisis. All of a sudden, the dark clouds around my heart dissapeared. Then optimism sand aloud, to the vision that was clear. Then I saw a ray of light, that shined across the sky. It's aurora shined so bright, that tears fell from my eyes. I knew that it was God tellin me, to hang on and don't cave in. He wanted me to rise and defeat, all of my self-doubts from within. Thanks to ray of light, my days have become bright. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Oh my, this was absolutley wonderful. So full of sadness and pain at the beginning. Your heart was so tormented and you turned it all around near the end and found your inner light, your love for life..........this was very inspirational to say the least. We must have been in the same mood as of late as I just wrote something along those lines about strength. We all have it....sometimes it takes "that special" something or someone to help us find it. Great poem here. Jenn E |
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BreyerRose Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 55Easton, Pa USA |
This is really pulling my heart strings. I loved it. Hugs and Kisses, Paula |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well expressed, Nate! I think we've all been down that road. I love the happing ending too! Denise |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Good spiritually upbuilding poem Nathan well done! |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you Jenn E, for your wonderful post. Thank you Paula, for your sweet comments. Thank you Denise, for your nice comments! Thank you ethome, for your nice comments. Nathan |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
Truly a wonderful piece...I can totally relate to this one, however I find my solace at a differnt place, you have poetically summed up my feelings from within...great job  "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nate I love the style and the message within the lines of this poem...James |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you, JNR4 and Jimmy, for your nice comments. Nathan |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nate, my friend~ Such positiveness from within ... it's a good thing ! 'I knew that it was God tellin me, to hang on and don't cave in. He wanted me to rise and defeat, all of my self-doubts from within.' Amen to that ! So good to see you, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Nate...what an excellent write here...from the darkness into the light...WOW |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I know all too well the darknes of which you speak. Glad that you have found your light, great work! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you Paula and Eagle One, for your nice comments. Nathan |
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