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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho 
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So............... I watched the < !signature-->moon set on our amour drifting truant yonder noble rocky ridges on dreadful barren night the criticism ran thick with anxious shoaling my thoughts couldn’t speak couldn't breathe apropos and no answers showing I could find pondering and thinking of you and your reflections long after you were gone and taken quench sight as if this is what was right for you why then in my soul do I feel it is so damn wrong If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley) [This message has been edited by lucky (edited 08-12-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
"My thoughts couldn't speak" What a wonderful line and so often true. Like this much, but I know it's not about my dear Rosemary Love Liz |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Hi.. Liz Where's the coffee..? Your right it's not about RJ. I was trying to write something in rememberance for my little brother. I guess I'm trying to give myself ideas. Our prayers are with you and Tony. Love You, Dale |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful style Dale.... clever to say the very least..enjoyed the read very much... great to see someone quote Michelle she's a wonderful poet. take care...ethome.. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Lucky~ you've written something special here and it is most certainly one of your many bests. tender writings lucky Take care buddy Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Lucky, talent certainly runs deep in your household. Great piece  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lucky Me ! To find words by you ! Reflecting is a path of ponder Whereupon your thoughts do wander Looking back through sighs of cause Often bringing reverent pause Your words about your brother find a crevice of ache in your heart ... you tell it well, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh Lucky, so pondering, and who can say except time itself, and maybe not then, why or what is...but still our minds won't release the questions. Many hugs and much love to you and RJ. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Just a thanks to you all for kind replies. lucky |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Just a thanks to you all for your kind replies. lucky |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Hey, you long tall rascalberry you! Posting poems while I sleep, eh? Well, I finally caught up with you, and, honey, you've done it again! So much emotion, a vivid picture painted. My dear husband, I so admire your work! The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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