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Eye of the Storm (in two perspectives)
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Eye of the Storm (in two perspectives) |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA 
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Eye of the storm We touch and the gentle breezes give way to raging winds Forceful gales foreshadow the storm that is brewing within We kiss as the rain starts to fall wetting us with its drops Fabric adheres to soft curves hard angles as we cling to each other You lick the raindrops drinking me in We love in the tempest Claps of thunder attempt to drown out all sound but I can still hear you moaning beneath me Lightning strikes— A visual statement of the electricity between us As our passion intensifies nature follows our lead and we become the eye of the storm (c) Tara Simms ************** Storm's Aftermath Playful twinkle in each other’s eyes as we listen to the soft patter of rain hitting the roof In the distance, the promise of the storm to come as we take other’s hand and whisper “rain” with a mixture of love and longing in our smiles A brief moment of hesitation (or is it anticipation) as we step outside and let the elements surround us The wind’s embrace encouraging us to hold each other closer as the first few raindrops bring chills of pleasure to bodies heated by arousal Tender kisses becoming hungry explorations as we taste the raindrops covering our glistening skin Drinking each other in as the rain falls harder Our hair matted wet ringlets dripping rivers across our shoulders and chest as they descend to fiery places below ignited by passion Our senses alive as we open our eyes to a thousand beads of light caught in a lightning flash of raindrops on skin We can no longer hold back the consuming desires within us as the weather arrives full force the wind and rain whipping about us as we make love in the eye of the storm our bodies an intense motion of wetness and heat A symphony of nature and emotion as the fury of the storm grows to a raging crescendo thunder roaring the rain pounding our bodies as our voices cry out our passions to the dark sky The storm slowly abates rain falling softly once again as we hold each other tenderly our bodies spent from our lovemaking nightshadows illuminating our smiles as we whisper “I love you” and sneak inside to fall asleep in each other’s arms (c) Jeff Osborne (RascalX) [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 08-15-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Passion with a lot of class. This is excellent writing, Tara... |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
An excellent story told excellently. How about "A Stormy Affair"? or "Concerto of Love" Larghetto Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Balladeer, thank you, sir. Jamie, I'll run those titles by him and see what he thinks. Thank you for the suggestion. It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Tara...whoa. Very intense imagery and passion. Ya'll both did an excellent job. Girl, I sure could use some of that humidity here...reckon you could mail some? |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Great poems, both a joy to read  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
An adult theme so tastefully and beautifully written. Excellent writing Liz |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Tara......both parts and versions were beautifully written! Excellent! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Alicat, rainclouds are on their way! Mark my words... Elizabeth, thank you. I wasn't sure if it was too "adult" for the Open forum so I ran it by the moderators first. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Lakewalker and Sunny1, Jeff and I both thank you for your comments! Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Tara, you know how I feel about this one. . .  Just wonderful. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Sven, I knew you'd enjoy this one! Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Thank you everyone for your wonderful comments and title suggestions...and thanks, of course, to Mother Nature for inspiring Tara and I's duet  ) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tara and RascalX~ Two very well-defined storm fronts ! Cataclysmic when they collide ! I think Eye Of The Storm fits the first one ... How about Storm's Aftermath for the second one ? These are both are done with excellence. Gosh ! And the local weather man just predicted 'fair skies' .... I was hoping for some stormy weather ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Marge, thanks for the read. I love your title suggestion and am running it by my sweetheart. Keep your eye on the horizon...storm clouds are rolling in! Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Marge, Thank you for you wonderful title suggestion. Given your metaphor for Tara and I as stormfronts (How accurate that is too! ), the title is a perfect complement to the poem. Although it's past the 24 hour period for editing, we'll ask Balladeer if we can change it. Thanks for capturing the essence of our duet.Jeff (rascalx) |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Let's see this one once more, folks! |
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