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Open Poetry #9
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Dragon's Soul
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 25
0 posted 2000-07-31 01:58 AM

Blood stains the sand
So i slipped this once
went to far
stepped over the edge

I was the one who hurt
Why should the blood stain my shirt
You stabbed me in the back

All i ever did was love you
So why do i stand here in the sand
with blood on my hands
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Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
1 posted 2000-07-31 02:08 AM

What a vivd image you portray here...incredible in its simplicicty

never say never
Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-08-02 11:39 PM

Very dramatic imagery!  
poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
3 posted 2000-08-03 05:26 AM

i agree with them! vivid, concise, cutting! loved it!
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