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Lonely, Tenderly, Happy Forever (written with Paula Finn)
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Lonely, Tenderly, Happy Forever (written with Paula Finn) |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! 
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Lonliness walked in My door today Looks like forever It's here to stay No longer in shadows Does this panic play Lonliness walked in My door today Tenderness breathed Your name on a sigh Making me wonder and Ask myself why I ever believed in The other's lies Tenderness breathed Your name on a sigh Happiness knocked on My door today Touching me gently Then running away Asking me to follow Asking me to play Happiness knocked on My door today Forever held me in it's Arms today As you looked at me That passionate way Making me tremble Wanting you to stay Forever held me in it's Arms today ************************** Thanks Paula [This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 08-06-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Jeffrey (and Paula)... Let me be the first to say that this is a great piece of writing!!!!! I love it......it even has a happy ending....... Thank you for sharing it with us! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Vaporous One Junior Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 35 |
"Tenderness breathed your name on a sigh" This line made me sigh! This was a gorgeous poem. Congratulations! I know how tough it can be writing a poem with another person, but your styles were obviously very compatible.  |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jeff...no thanks are needed its such a pleasure to write with you |
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Kyle Finn Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 36Linn, MO USA |
hey you guys write well together [This message has been edited by Kyle Finn (edited 08-06-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ and Jeffrey~ Oh, I like it ! Especially like that 'forever' word !  A remarkable co-write. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
remarkably wonderful work... you two make a good team.... Jeffrey and Paula, My regards to you two... Sudhir |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Thank you.....once again all the credit goes to Paula for this one |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Jeffrey and Paula, What a wonderful poem! You two work well together I have to agree with Vaporous One.. the lines "Tenderness breathed, Your name on a sigh" are beautiful.rosepetals |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sunny1...its easy writing happy endings with Jeff VaporousOne...yes we seem to intertwine well and thanks Kyle...thank you bud Marge...Jeff is a remarkable poet and he honors me when he patners my endeavours Sudhir...thank you friend we appreciate your kind words rosepetals...Jeff makes beauty easy to see...thank you Jeffrey...thank you for sharing your talent with me never say never |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Well Jeffrey and Paula, This is wonderful, I love the flow here, you to do awesome together. Love, Cerenity  "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This flowed so well and I loved the ending. You write well together. Jenn E |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Cerenity...Jeff makes it so easy to write...his talent is remarkable and its an honor to share with him Jenn E...we make a team he and I lol...our words just seem to compliment even tho our styles are different... Thanks both of you |
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