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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
She wakes to sunlight streaming in her window. For a moment the night before forgotten. Then it all comes flooding back And once again the teardrops fall. Knowing what she has to do doesnt make it any easier Who can blame her for wanting to stay in bed Holding her teddy bear, being a child. Those things now lost to her forever more. She leaves her bed and slowly dresses Brushes her hair and makes up her face. Then goes to face her family. All her hard won courage falters When she sees her daddys' eyes. What she's lost can never be recovered What she's gained has yet to be seen. So she calls them all together Says " I have something to say This isnt easy so please be patient You know I've loved him for so long now With my heart and in my mind. Now I've loved him with my body And now I have a price to pay." She watched the truth dawn in their eyes. Tears on her cheeks for the failed dreams. Then slowly her mom comes to stand before her Taking tear stained cheeks in loving hands And says the only thing a mother can. We love you, daughter, we always will. She straightens her shoulders and turns to her father And he sees a woman where his little girl once stood. I'm keeping my baby are the words she whispers I'm keeping this child to cherish and love. This is my muses answer to Zions challenge for a decision from Always Other Choices [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 07-30-2000).] |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Wow--This was very moving. I must say it is like a page out of my life...I too faced my family 25 yrs ago...their response was very loving too.. Nicely done Paula |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Beautiful words! "And he sees a woman where his little girl once stood" Nicely written! All of the poem! Voted |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
WOW Paula... very moving... Voted!!! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
KitKat...wasnt it worth it? insect...thank you Todd...thank you my friend XXXXX never say never |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is a very tender and moving poem. Fortunately times have changed and these problems can at least be handled now without disgracing the young woman involved. I know it's still a long hard road to face but at least there's some help..especially if the family stands by with their love for the daughter unmoved. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
And he sees a woman where his little girl once stood. Nice follow up to the first one. Well done.  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Heartfelt weave Paula....your muse answered the call very well~ |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Paula.... This is excellent and very touching. My vote as always.... ~~ To Live is to Give ~~ |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Her parents have love enough in their hearts to understand her ... so she has love enough in her heart to keep and raise her child ... a beautiful family Rex |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Mark...yes my muse did me proud on this one. Bdc...As soon as I read Zions challenge she started clamoring to be heard...I put her off for a few days but wow she is insistent...thank you. Sunny1...I can always count on your kind comments, and they are better because I know you are sincere. Rex...without family what is there? never say never |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
An excellent poem, Paula... regards, sudhir |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ A sincere - GOOD JOB ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
My heart jumped with happiness when I read this beautiful poem...James |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Great job indeed...well done Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
paula this was wonderful you have my vote |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Paula~ This is a very powerful and moving poem. Very strong and compassionate at the same time. I love this! Great job, dear! Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You know I've loved him for so long now With my heart and in my mind. Now I've loved him with my body And now I have a price to pay." She watched the truth dawn in their eyes. ==================== and turns to her father And he sees a woman where his little girl once stood. ================= powerfull images here, well written and defined by the emotions sometimes these stories have happy endings, sometimes not, some people cant be as accepting or forgiving. giving unconditional love is the key challenge very well met Paula. thanks for the sincere replies in open 8 this weekend ... take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
..ulp...very powerful poem. good ending. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sudhir...thank you Marge...you are always such an inspiration. James...I am glad I could make you happy. Tracie...thank you Martini...thanks it was a touchy write Terry...you are so sweet to say so...thank you JM...as always your words mean so much to this poet...and reading your work just inspires me more. Beowulf...thank you friend. never say never |
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cathybohannan Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 140Paintsville,KY |
This was a lovely poem, Paula you have a special talent |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Cathy..thank you for your kind words never say never |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
VOTING |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
unconditional love..the only kind there should be...yes I am voting also ~~softly Maureen |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Yes nothing like standing behind your children....This was beautifully expressed..Some choices aren't meant to be made alone.... Julie :) |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
you've got my vote as well! this is a touching piece...and i also lived this poem as have so many others. thank you for your words. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jeff...your vote means so much...thanks BRAT..(ptn) MMoonchild...you are right...there should never be conditions put on love. JulieAnn...not this choice anyway. poutprincess...thank you...I hope your choice was the right one for you. never say never |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Paula, I browse about tonite and find this one you penned some weeks ago... My goodness eyes would not stop the tears as I read along thru verse to end... Such a heartwarming poem with a pivotal message for parents and young women of today... Coco |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Whoa! I'm glad Coco brought this one around again. I may have missed it otherwise. Beautiful free verse. You could hear the silence when the daughter spoke. As always, Paula... beautiful. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Coco...thank you...I hated seeing this one go Trev...Thank you friend...there are actually three different poems that go with this...Always Other Choices...this one...and one more that for the life of me I cannot remember the title of...I will look and come back and edit this for you....Was It Worth Thew Sacrifice [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 09-04-2000).] |
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