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Ocean's Spell
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Ocean's Spell |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Ocean's SpellAnd staring out upon the sea she shifts atop the stones the slippery edges christened by each bracing blast of foam And rouge has risen in her cheeks and high her pulses race as hissing winds so swiftly thrash their kisses 'pon her face And quick! she think she spies the ship just there! beyond the swells A knot of anguish grips her throat No ship, just ocean's spell It's eighty days upon these rocks and eighty one 'twill be She lowers head in grief relived a shadow toward the sea And stepping slowly from her perch her skirts a sodden train she slogs the length of shore to home as it begins to rain |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Y'know, Nan'll reply to this...she has to, it has her name on it, through your soul... Claire, your works are admired...mightily!< !signature--> Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 08-04-2000).] |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Claire, You obviously know I love this one. Hey, I'm an ocean fan...and of course, also a great fan of your wonderful words. Nice going. Michael |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is so beautifully heart breaking....so much emotion and imagery......WOW!!!! Breathtaking work~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--you are so good at setting the perfect mood and then touching us with the perfect ending...wonderful imagery in this sad poem. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
She walks upon cold barren shore, as leaps from rock to rock, While on the waves the schooner sails, no harbor which to dock. Eighty days in pounding waves, a'drift in moaning sea, Howling chorus of the deep, Poseidon's melancholy. Whilst in her bed, she weeps alone, he sails to Neptune's grave, Silent tomb 'neath whitecapped foam, two hearts will soon enslave. you do possess a unique and special poetic talent my friend. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Claire, another excellent piece you have penned here.  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, this is wonderful. . .*sigh* I've been finding that your work speaks to me more and more every day. . . --------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sunshine, you are indeed aptly named (or pseudonymed, at least). Thank you for your kindness and positive reply. Michael, I had just an inkling that you might enjoy this one. Thank you, my friend. Your encouragement is a treasure to me. Butterflies, your "wow" made my day...thank you! Martie, I thank you, sincerely, for your kind natured words, and for being able to enjoy my sad poems. I am one of your biggest fans, my friend. Mike, I have awakened in Heaven, and you have deposited me there. How you can write! This is classic verse, my friend, and I thank you humbly for such a gifting. Eloise, thank you so much for reading and leaving such kind words for me. Sven, I believe they have medication for that. (Teasing!) Sven, knowing that my words speak to you in some way just really delights me. Thank you, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wonderful imagery and the sadness really cuts through.....beautiful creation you have given us.. "the sea, once it casts it's spell, holds one in it's net of wonder forever." Jacques Cousteau |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Meadowmuse that is incredibly beautiful work. The mood of the wait is unbelievable and the scenic word pictures you use are just wonderful. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Breathtaking...what a scene, I am very envious yet equally in deep admiration of the words that flow from your pen. I eagerly await the next dazzling piece. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ This is exquisite ... I was reminded of a lighthouse within the heart ... searching. Unique is your talent for nostalgic melancholy. *Mike's reply was like netting the oyster .... and finding a pearl. A double treat here for sure. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Claire... I grew up on the ocean, and spent many years sitting on the rocks watching the ships. I truly love the way you wrote this!! It brought back a few memories.......... I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mark, thank you! I must concur with M.Cousteau, fully. ethome, your response is so kind. I'm glad you found something to enjoy in this piece, and I thank you for letting me know. Brian, thank you. Your enthusiasm is wonderful. I haven't written anything all day, so I am eagerly awaiting the next piece right along beside you! Thanks, dear. Miss Marge, thank you for reading, my friend. Yes, isn't Mike's poem absolutely stunning? He has such a knack for brilliance, doesn't he? I remain in awe of his art. Sunny, how wonderful that you were reminded of pleasant times beside the sea by my little poem. Thank you for letting me know this. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Your words cast a spell of their own, Claire! This, of course, is magnificent! Denise |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
The shore is mesmerizing, as are your words here....beautiful! |
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