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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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there's a window that won't go away over our words. a hush that can't be cried away with water, sticky paper. a sky that slowly pulls apart its cloud-sutured distance, spraying bright sharp light like needles in knees. there's a fear not to be discovered in that sky, nor an empty room, nor one full of those but us. there's a whispered yearning rush like crushed velvet, satin, plush. i burn for her. this is our time to shine, to flare, to gasp like the fallen horizon never again to know the sun. to flower with love or loss; i can almost hear her. i can almost feel her parts -- head and body, soulcollected like invisible rain on moonpooled leaves, stones. nothing falls over the slowpiecing dark. under summer's leaden promise of fun and escape, it's our time to decide the waiting wall's shape. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mike, this is so full of tender yearning, tinged with impatient frustration...written by your heart, so I could I not love this? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
i burn for her. this is our time to shine, to flare, to gasp like the fallen horizon never again to know the sun. to flower with love or loss; i can almost hear her. i can almost feel her parts -- head and body, soulcollected like invisible rain on moonpooled leaves, stones. nothing falls over the slowpiecing dark. under summer's leaden promise of fun and escape, it's our time to decide the waiting wall's shape. ==================== i can feel you in every line of this soulful piece... awesome bsq... i do so adore when you write like this. later-deep-gator me |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
It is in the soundings of the words, the projection into the mind of the images that rise from the words, and the words themselves, that one becomes lost...when reading your work. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
 Thanks, all.Mike |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike--I really like the way you write! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, Martie. And reading your stuff, the feeling is mutual. Mike |
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