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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-09-21 10:39 AM


The Whisper

Lives congeal
at times, given time
grow hard and unrepentant
dry up and blow away
like so much Oklahoma dust

       hearts crumble

winds blow, winds blow

searchers know
and keep looking…

       searching

she did
and heard a whisper
looked around and found
a sign of possibility in dust so dry
she was full of expectation
and heard the whisper

       whispering

whispers hold a promise
whether here or there
there shall always be
a dance in a whisper

       dancing

always a knowledge that
sometime down the dusty road
better will come
and better will stay
life will be reborn
the drought will end
and the dream of the whisper
will become the reality

       reborn

so that life, and love, will flow again.


21 September, 2000
©Karilea Rilling Jungel


© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2000-09-21 10:49 AM


"always a knowledge that
sometime down the dusty road
better will come
and better will stay
life will be reborn
the drought will end
and the dream of the whisper
will become the reality"

Superb Karilea! I say this not only because I truly believe these thoughts you've written, but becaused you've penned them so incredibly well. The format flows beautifully, exeptionally well done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Wilfred Yeats
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2 posted 2000-09-21 11:03 AM


Not that I don't have an original thought but Kit said just what I wanted to say - if she's not offended - let me say it too
Mark Bohannan
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3 posted 2000-09-21 11:17 AM


You will know if the whisperings will become a reality as soon as you no longer hear them but instead feel them.  I sincerely wish for you to feel these whispers soon and somehow I know that you shall.  You show a strength that will get you there given time and patience.

[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 09-21-2000).]

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4 posted 2000-09-21 12:04 PM


Hear the whispers. . .know what they say. . . they speak to the heart. . .

Wonderful my friend. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Tennessee Angel
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5 posted 2000-09-21 12:32 PM


What a wonderful verse of hope!  I absolutely adore this piece!!  

--You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.--

brian madden
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6 posted 2000-09-21 01:43 PM


always a knowledge that
sometime down the dusty road
better will come
and better will stay
life will be reborn
the drought will end
and the dream of the whisper
will become the reality

       reborn

so that life, and love, will flow again.

Karilea, beautifully written piece, nothing ever truely dies especially hope.

My view stretches out from the fence to the wall No words could explain, no actions determine Just watching the trees and the leaves as they fall:Joy

Alle'cram
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7 posted 2000-09-21 02:08 PM


Sunshine,
  Wow! You know I love it! Wise, wise words of beauty in poetry. This, is the way it is and to come. This is now, one of my two favorites of yours.  Love, Marcy

Sunshine
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8 posted 2000-09-21 03:44 PM


Kit, kind words...thank you...

Mr. Yeats, you may always "ditto"...

Mark, the imagination is a wondrous thing...

Sven, I'm listening, thank you...

Brian, thanks for looking in...and you're right...

Marcy, I'm 2 for 2?  Alright! Thanks!


nando
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9 posted 2000-09-21 03:48 PM


Sunshine

You really gave me sunshine in my evening with this wonderful poem...Loved every word...

-nando-


Ask me how to live your life, and this to you I´ll say: make your choises true and wise, so that when tomorrow will arise, you´ll smile at yesterday...

Dee
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10 posted 2000-09-21 03:51 PM


Karilea, I love the thought:
better will come
and better will stay

It brings so much hope. Lets face it thats what we all need.
Dee

CAMERON UNDERWOOD
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11 posted 2000-09-21 05:41 PM


I've always been told you will find what your looking for, when you not looking at all.
And in every case it has been true for me.
Maybe you'll find what you looking for and you'll be unexpectedly knocked off your feet.
I've seen it happen many time to others.

Best Wishes


Sunshine
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12 posted 2000-09-22 09:04 AM


TA, thank you for your comment...

Nando, I try to bring sunshine everywhere...such a bummer when folks are trying to sleep...LOL...

Dee, you are so very right...

Cameron, you are right on target, thank you for reading...

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