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Sky Dance |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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 Sky DanceGazing upon this clouded nights eye Breasted heaviness of lonesome sigh Stirring the depths of secrets shelled Stars between billowing wonders held ~~~*~~~ Dancing entwined in constellations power Luna's light cleansing in fearful shower Messages of trust and deep hearted fear Shedding release of my yesterdays tear Milky essence across nine o'clock sky Wisping away fears in this sweetened cry Hands upon dippers pouring into heart The promise of days we have yet to start ~~~*~~~ Waltzing among angels on heaven's wake Starlit kisses caressing in the steps we take Careful to not shake the silence carried loud Waking not natures lust in passionate shroud Protected in miles of memories to be shared Two-stepping in rhythm to emotions chaired Flower on the wall of Saturn's brillant glow Allowing the freedom of the places we now go Mark Bohannan [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 09-20-2000).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
O, I have a feeling this one should never touch the ground...Mark, your talents are ever-growing...well done Sir, well done! For once I am rendered speechless from adding anything to it...nope, this stands alone... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
I liked the graphic effects. They certainly captured a twinkle from my eye without detracting from the poem, nonesoatall. Very vunderfully vitten. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Mark... This is beautifully written, and I do so enjoy the added twinkle!! I bet you're a great dancer, too!!  Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A wonderous escape into the stars in your eyes! Corinne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Gazing upon this clouded nights eye Breasted heaviness of lonesome sigh Stirring the depths of secrets shelled Stars between billowing wonders held ============================== Messages of trust and deep hearted fear Shedding release of my yesterdays tear ========================= Hands upon dippers pouring into heart The promise of days we have yet to start ===================== Waltzing among angels on heaven's wake Starlit kisses caressing in the steps we take Careful to not shake the silence carried loud Waking not natures lust in passionate shroud ======================== Protected in miles of memories to be shared Two-stepping in rhythm to emotions chaired Flower on the wall of Saturn's brillant glow Allowing the freedom of the places we now go ======================== tho it is nearly impossible for me to pick my most fav line in this mystical star kissed jewel..... My heart chooses this one "The promise of days we have yet to start" that truly says it all... this poem is exquisite in its hearts expressions... and I know the heart that it was wrote for is very touched and moved by it-- as it is written from your heart... and I for one know how truly special of a gift that is... you grow and shine everytime you pick up that poets pen of yours.. and we grow in your poetic heart's healing light. love you MC thank you for all that your friendship gives me each day... I am a better me--for knowing you. me< !signature--> There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 09-20-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark---You do love so well... "Careful to not shake the silence carried loud"...Wonderful, my friend! |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Sometimes I look at other people's work here and I'm in speechless. This is one of those times. Well done Mark, it's beautiful. Dee |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Mark What an awesome gift for writing you have. I think is my favorite. Deb |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* This is absolutely beautiful!!!!! Oh you have kissed the stars with this one my dear friend!! I've read through this atleast 10 times trying to pick a favorite moment and there is just no way I could ever decide on one when they all dance perfectly...what a beautiful heart you have...and it shines brilliantly here within your weave of the night sky~ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
absolutely beautifully done in every way.  |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I am in agreeance with all above Mark ... to pick a favorite line within this beauty is far too difficult, for they flowed so incredibly beautifully, one into the other. Excellent command of language used in this romantic and moving piece Mark, really lovely! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Karilea-Let's hope that the hearts never touch the ground either. You wouldn't believe the view from up here....well living in KS maybe you already know of the view. I don't care what LJA says, KS is beautiful and I wish I were back there. Thank you. Masked Intruder-Many thanks to you. Sunny1-Never be afraid to bet on a cowboy and BTW.....you get and A+ for studying so well. Corinne-Thank you much...always nice to escape the everyday for the clouds. JM-Aint it just great when two friends can share the others graces and never get in the way of the others glow. Thank you for YOU and yes that one line really says it all. Martie-I do my best but to tell you the truth I don't even try...it just comes led by my heart. You know I would hug ya if I could.....thanks my friend. Dee-silence in enjoyment is just as precious...Thank you much. Deb-I am glad you have a favorite now I must see if I can make a new one for you to like as much. You too my friend have an awesome talent and others will be finding out soon I am sure....even if some of them come from nowhere....LOL....you scream...I scream....we all scream for ice cream. Thank you much Holly-Did you know that the twinkle in my eye is from you smiles upon me? Yeah, I would hope so by now my sweet. You know....they know now...LOL...woooohhhoooo yeah baby....angel kisses all night and all day!!! Thank you my dear for being my inspiration in so much of my life. Victoria-Thank you so much Kit-Thank you much and wonderful aliteration on your 3000th post you penned. Challenge met and exceeded. Thank you for your continued support and levity. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Oh Mark, this is simply perfect!!!! I do so love how you write. Always with your heart and soul. Beautiful my friend. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MarkB~ I read this at work today and was so struck by it's pure beauty from your heart. You've got an inkwell overflowing from within. Keep writing 'em, Cowboy ! 'Milky essence across nine o'clock sky Wisping away fears in this sweetened cry Hands upon dippers pouring into heart The promise of days we have yet to start' Oh my ! You're a really good poet, Mark. Let your heart keep leading you. Love ya', hon. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I've seen those stars before!!!! This is great writing, Mark....imagery at its finest |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Marina-Have I told you how much I appreciate your kind words. Thank you so much my friend. Marge-WOW...my friend you never leave me without a smile....thank you so very much. Balladeer-Aren't they lovely and so tenderly sweet. Thank you once again kind sir. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Beautifully written, Mark! Ah, the stars. Best thing!! (second to the rain, of course)  sp |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Snowpants-So who ever said that you couldn't have the stars dancing in the rain....peek inbetween those clouds of heaven's tears and you will surely see heaven's eyes. Thank you so very much. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oops, had to add to library... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
the effects of this are wonderful, as are your words... a beautiful dance Mark...GE |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mark this is a real diamond, a sparkling gem. I love this, a shining star as are you. Take care. Beautifully expressed and it's just perfect. |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oh, absolute perfection! This just make you want to sit back, sigh, and then read it again! As a lover of the night time..this one is going in my library. Wonderful work! |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
What a dance!! cha cha cha I know the stars are twinkling just for you! Totally awesome |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Mark-Let me catch my breath, OK, simply splendid, graceful and transcending, what more can I say, I loved it. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Karilea-  I'll leave the moon hanging for you so you can find the door to your library..  Greeneyes-Thank you so much and I am glad you enjoyed the dance. Marsha-Why thank you but if it is a diamond that you want to see then here you go./pip/Forum33/HTML/003086.html Tennessee Angel-I am honored to be in your library so I thank you twice my friend. Rosebud1229-Never for just one my friend...it takes two to tango you know...and to tangle and to entertwine and to.....well you know...thanking you with a smile. Gemini-Please go ahead and breathe. Thank you so much for you wonderful replies |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
came back by for another dance  who knew a cowboy could dip LOL me |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Ooh, stars in the rain! Could it get any better than that?? Very interesting view! I love it! I never thought about it that way!! sp |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Breasted heaviness of lonesome sigh Stirring the depths of secrets shelled Simply beautifully worded Mark, and how do you get those twinkling stars? Lovely work... sighing here. Linda Munday |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Jan-you may have as many dances as you want as long as you can do it from your cell...lol Thank you my sweet prisoner of rehab... snowpants-nope dont think it could until you throw in the midnight rainbow. Thank you so much.Linda-Thank you so much and I will send these to you in your poem so you will have them |
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