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Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2000-09-18 08:46 AM

Of candles and fireflies

Like fireflies our candles burn
Within our cavern store.
Each transitory bright an urn
That burns and burns no more.

We multiply by fetching feel
Two lights that will comply
We try and teach the circle wheel
And let the offspring fly.

We cannot pass the boundary line
We live within a sphere
And if we do not redesign
We'll surely disappear.

The firefly will disappear
The candle will go out.
The form will change within the sphere
To me there is no doubt.

I plead the firefly to fly
I pray the candle not to die.

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

1 posted 2000-09-19 07:33 AM

The title is beautiful, and the message is comforting, delicate. The flow in this is amazingly sweet. It just really got to me!

Kathleen

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 2000-09-19 07:37 AM

Nice one - Keep those fires burnin', Sy...

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

3 posted 2000-09-19 08:06 AM

Sy,
this was both light and warm. Keep up the good work.
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

4 posted 2000-09-19 08:22 AM

Great message here - we change or we die, and who wants to die? I like the flow, and the way you wrote the intro, which led into the theme, and thereby formed the conclusion. Very tight writing, which I've come to expect from your poetry.

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

5 posted 2000-09-19 08:42 AM

As always, meanings running deep.

Corinne

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

6 posted 2000-09-19 10:04 AM

Very lovely Seymour Tabin..

"There is a chord in every
                                                     heart that has a sigh in it,
                                                        if touched aright."
                                                - Marie Louse De La Ramee (1839-1908),
                                                         English Writer

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2000-09-19 12:25 PM

Sy,
the flame will never die, so long as we have the fuel to burn it. . .

Excellent. . .

------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2000-09-19 02:04 PM

sigh...sending candles...

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2000-09-19 03:08 PM

Irish Rose, Thank you.

Nan, I'll try.

Kethry, Thank you.

LngJhnag, Thanks from a kissing buddy.

Corinne, Nice comment.

Victoria, Wonderful comment.

Sven, your right and thanks.

Sunshine, I'll expect them in the mail. *L*

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