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Through the Heart of Night
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Through the Heart of Night |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Through the Heart of NightThe night came calling vast and low upon this haunted heart and loitered, black, in sorrow's throe as last the light's depart It beckoned quite seductively and into darkness drew though struggle was my first incline 'til weak my spirit grew For on this evening lingered doubt and taste of soiling shame I sudden fell to following Night's foul alluring flame And thus beset a million miles of rough and rutted road to drag upon, my broken form, a weak and loathsome load 'Pon passage lined with life's regret and paved with dread's decay I journeyed through the heart of Night and into dull of day [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 09-17-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sometimes the things we do in the heart of night haunt us through the light of many days to come. It is almost like with the darkness a different soul encases our bodies. I think most of us have been there at least once. Wonderfully put in your so very awesome way. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A haunting tune that lingers, meadowmuse. Corinne |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Claire, You have such a way with words...even a night such as this you are able to describe with a certain beauty. Take care, Michael Proust- "Love is space and time measured by the heart" |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, there is ne'er a dark so black that light cannot pierce it. . . Hauntingly beautiful my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Meadowmuse, Oh, what words these are, especially touching me at these moments. A haunted heart, how well I know this person, how well. "The night came calling vast and low upon this haunted heart and loitered, black, in sorrow's throe as last the light's depart" Glad I came by today, this is excellent. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mark, thank you...sometimes it's not so much the things we do as the things done to us. Thanks for reading. Corinne, thank you for letting me know you read and enjoyed. Michael, thank you, my friend. Sven, I thank you for such encouraging words. Bill, I am pleased to know this touched you...these feelings are difficult to write about. Thank you, Bill. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
Like Corinne said.. Haunting and sad and somehow chilling. Good poem, loved the form. Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You have described it perfectly, Claire, If I didn't know sorrow personally, I would after reading this. Very well expressed. Denise |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, Haunting . . . so real . . . I can feel the lonliness. Great writing.  Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ No one wraps melancholy in a more delicate package than you do. You draw the reader into the scene so uniquely artful. Always a pleasure to read you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
You make the writing of such poetry look easy - and the penning of such inner things no more difficult than the verse of a drugstore card. - only those of us who have had such feelings and tried to write them - know what genius you have. ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Meadowmuse This was just excellent all the way around. I really loved the last stanza of your peom. This made me feel the regret that I pictured all though this piece. "I journeyed through the heart of night" "and into the dull of day." Man! this was just an awesome way to end this piece. Gosh! I just can't tell you how impressive this was and how much I liked it. Garfield |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Cuddlez, Denise, Lone Wolf, Marge, Wilfred, Garfield...thank you all, in earnest, for your very kind and generous responses to this piece. Hopefully today will be a brighter day. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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