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Nan
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0 posted 2000-09-16 10:46 PM


Aye, look from shore as far as eye can sea
At waving tiers of wont.  Your pounding heart
Beats harmonies on lonely bights, a part
Of shoal’s; deep passion is revealed to me.
A spray of droplets whispers in my ear
As symphonies brew tempests that cascade
Effluent torrents – Thence shoal’s all is said.
Transuding chants of seasong’s muse I hear

Upon mere’s surface – heart and soul in frith’s
Fluidic dance about the brink of tide.
You sea this citadel’s embracing shore
In countenance amount this earthen plinth’s
Protective strand, your deep lee sanctified
In Heaven’s light asea forever more.





© Copyright 2000 Nancy Ness - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-09-16 10:50 PM


Your poems always hold some magical light for me. Its usually like being in the middle of a fairy tale or visiting dreams.  
Heres hoping all is well with you, Nanners!


Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"


Denise
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2 posted 2000-09-16 10:55 PM


Absolutely beautiful, Nan! One of my favorites of yours! I love your sonnets!

Denise

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3 posted 2000-09-16 11:09 PM


Nan~
This is lovely.
The picture is AWESOME too !
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Corinne
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4 posted 2000-09-16 11:10 PM


Fabulous and lyrical, Aye, yer Irish words ring like the tunes of the ancestors!

Corinne

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5 posted 2000-09-16 11:16 PM


my oh my..I do so love a sonnet..
and a NAN sonnet is oh so lovely
superb as always our queen of cadence
jm

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6 posted 2000-09-16 11:23 PM


FanNANtastic, m'dear......a worthy repost.
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7 posted 2000-09-16 11:31 PM


I'm gonna have a million questions about how you did this, grin---surely you knew that, tho...totally in awe...and I shall never repost again.  (smile)  But this is why you are Queen Nan.  
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8 posted 2000-09-17 01:51 AM


Wher or where to start? to tell you the sonnet is magnificent?  to tell you you've increased my vocabulary? to ask when (or how) can I add my own pictures to my poems?
I've seen these cape sunsets - I'm sure you know how blessed you are.

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9 posted 2000-09-17 08:56 AM


This is beautiful, Nan... I drove to the sea yesterday so that her breezes could clear the clutter of my mind... reading your poem this morning is a wonderful reminder!
Nan
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10 posted 2000-09-17 09:00 AM


Thank you my dear friends...

Jenn - Sometimes I think that life itself is a fairy tale - You're quite the incessant Dreamer, you are... Caught yer wave this morning - Thanks...

Denise - Thanks for bringing this one to mind.. It's one of my personal favorites too..

Marge - Thanks - writing about the ocean is something I haven't done in awhile - perhaps it's time again...

Corinne - Yep.. Even my Scandinavian ancestors??  Tak Samicka (sp?)!..

Janet Marie - Glad you stopped by... Cadence, eh?... That's the thing that gets in my way when I try to write free verse, isn't it???..

BallaDEERdeer - Thanks Sweets...

serenity - Glad you appreciate it - This really is a pretty heavy piece of work, not for the faint of ear...

Wil - Such very kind words - I humbly thank you - This particular sonnet is best when "heard" - There are even more word plays in this one than I recall originally writing... Check with me on ICQ and I'll show you how to post the pics - Thanks again...


Bill Charles
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11 posted 2000-09-17 11:10 AM


Good morning Nan,
This is absolutely beautiful and takes my breath away. I love the picture, and try as I may, I would love to be able to insert one now and again.

A truly wonderful poem.

Bill

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12 posted 2000-09-17 11:47 AM


the poem is lovely... the graphic is beautiful (did you do it?)

just a couple of questions... what's a frith? and what's a plinth? hehe... thanks!!!    

Mike
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13 posted 2000-09-17 04:44 PM


O' what tortures doth thee press Naniness?
                Hast thou bee's swarm hidden in thy bonnet,
                As thou dost perplex with thy wordiness?
                Bardess, what creature this, evil sonnet?
                That doth confound poetic neophyte.
                As did Moses, lead to thy promised land,
                With thy learned teachings, show me bard's light,
                So I might scribe as doth thou bardess hand.
                I fear I sink in ocean of despair,
                As from mine head, with trembling hand I pull,
                What doth remain, what once was known as hair,
                I beg of thee, as runneth out of mine bull,
                I close with this, in all seriousness,
                I read in awe, poetic gems of Ness.

Nan
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14 posted 2000-09-18 06:44 AM


Humble thanks, all...

suthern - Isn't it amazing what a walk by the ocean can do for you?... I rarely get wet, of course - just meander by...

Bill - So happy to see you enjoyed the read - 'Tis not exactly a light one..

Doreen - Um... I think it'th the number before thecond, ithn't it???...

Mike - Whatever it takes to get good poetry out of you, my friend...:8

Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 2000-09-18 07:18 AM


Mike, You are hilarious! What a laugh

Nan, I read this beautiful sonnet (with dictionary) and as always marvel at your beautiful phrasing (how does she split them and it all comes out just right?)and your eloquence (never heard of half the words) and your form (had to look up what kind of sonnet this was).
It is beautiful
Liz

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16 posted 2000-09-18 09:10 AM


A beautiful picture to match the poem  
Kit McCallum
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17 posted 2000-09-18 07:31 PM


Oh Nan ... this is simply stunning. The movement and flow of the words ... so melodic, I had to read it aloud, just to savour it. Beautiful Nan!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 09-18-2000).]

Martie
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18 posted 2000-09-18 08:24 PM


Nan--a wonderous land of words you own...and I just a back lot...

This was breathtaking...!

Nan
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19 posted 2000-09-19 07:13 AM


Aye, many thanks to all...

Elizabeth - I really appreciate your taking time from your already overburdened day to stop by and read - God Bless you, my friend..

Hey Ruth - Nice seeing you too... Thanks - and aren't you sposed to be being in love somewhere????...

Kit - Thanks - Some of the syntax takes on a whole new meaning when it's read aloud - At least I hope so - That was my intent...

Martie - Thanks - You've got quite a back lot - I surely enjoy visiting it..

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