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Jaysun C Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 56 |
My kite in Flyte is Cool as January Soaked beaches Fly I on teather Bad weather Pulls anchor me along Draging toes With wind blows Guiding me to What heaven shows Knows I Where to go Don't think so |
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Jaysun C Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 56 |
well I love this poem so I just have to write a responce to it. I looks so bad for it to slowly fall down the bracket whith a big honking zero responces next to it slowly slipping into the chasams of yesterdays poetry to never be looked upon again =()= |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i dont know how i missed it but im glad you brought it back up to our attention...i like this...i like the way it just blends word into word...much enjoyed. "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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Jaysun C Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 56 |
Poutprincess- I just have to say tak you so very much I love you for that, where can i read your poetry? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Back to the top, Jaysun--I loved the feeling behind this...keep writing, luvie. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Hey. . . I have to agree with Jaysun and tell you that this is a really cool poem. . . Excellent. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
mmmmm kite flying I love it |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Jaysun, This is nice writing... regards, Sudhir |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
Flying kite slipped fell and slowly went down the list again when a breeze came by and *pop* its back up. Cute... Cuddlez Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
I have to say I love the line/description "Soaked beaches"; two words and I'm flooded with images of tides licking sand and sinking through. What choice! This verse is also particularly visually aesthetically tuned. I adore the simplicity (this, when I myself am so darn verbose … go figure). [This message has been edited by grandiloquent (edited 09-17-2000).] |
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