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The Heart of the City--Monday Night
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The Heart of the City--Monday Night |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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here in the heart of the city a fan spins and sitting here by the window as the lightning begins to flash I think about everything and nothing the jukebox plays a lonely song. . . one for broken hearts my glass and I share a table it only pauses to let me sip from it and taste its redness. . . the shiraz taste of sharp grapes, filling my mind smoke wafts through the air clouding my sight, making things seem different. . . I wonder, is this all? There has to be more. . . the bartender tells a story that no one really hears. . . but that everyone knows well, it's almost time to go, I've only come for the time to write this the lightning begins to flash more I've got to get home it's Monday night at Kelly's here in the heart of the city. . . keep the change. . . -------------------------------------------------------------- --------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Very well done Sven. Such a feeling of loneliness well displayed. And ya know I find myself asking all the time, is this all there is. Juls [This message has been edited by juliet_2u (edited 09-12-2000).] |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Very interesting poem Sven. I am really liking these different sides of you, you are showing us. A sign of a good poet, I think!  Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Juls, I know that this is not all there is. . . there's always more. . .thank you my friend. . . Marina, just trying out some new things. . .and I hope that it's the sign of a good poet! ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Jaysun C Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 56 |
seven- This poem is so real, maby because most of us have been in the same place in our mind, if not the same bar. Good writing, It takes me there=)(= |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Sven, a wonderfully written piece very atmospheric, very real, can just hear the roar of traffic. This is the hour when the mysteries emerge A strangeness so hard to reflect A moment so moving goes straight to your heart" JOy divison |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
oh Sven, even though this little place seems a bit sad, id have to say that i actually find some charm in it...hey, next time im in town..i'll buy you a beer...see if we can lighten sorrow's load for a spell. ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Jaysun, thank you. . . I thought that I saw you there that night! Brian, good. . . I was going for that feel. . .thank you. . . glad that I was able to show you that. . . Dawn, it's not a bad little place. . . and whenever you're around. . . the first one's on me! Thank you my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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