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Sagittarius- the Centaur (astrology challenge)
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Sagittarius- the Centaur (astrology challenge) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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A double acrostic. This was really HARD, my sense of balance requires rhyme and meter so hopefully it's internal. But the lines just kept getting longer. Sagittarius, born of Centaur's git, known to be nefarious- the archer's sign is it Always seeks the best, always aims high, unlike the rest, strives for perfection, sigh Going is out, seldom alone, nature is open, introspection has none In a hurry, playing the trick, always restless, looking chic Tactless, gives free advice, no sense to see others worth or price Tsunami in bright clothing, generous and willing, whirlpool in a spin A sense of humor sometimes bright lit, sometimes dark, lives by intuit Rarely at a lost for words, imagination meets her, at a party laugh is hearty, eats jam on pizza I the central figure, to itself is true, an anomaly and honest more than me or you Uconditionally real, whose sometimes passions soar,love the ancient seal causes the crowd to roar Sagittarius the only one that plays up to the gods, passions pride on the run and with silver muse is shod. < !signature--> "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- [This message has been edited by Kethry (edited 09-11-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Kethry, I tried one of these the other day, spent hours on it, then just gave up. I am in awe of your poem. A double acrostic is darn hard. Great work Liz |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Kethry, Wow.. your poem is wonderful.. I am interested in trying this challange.. but I don't know what my 2nd word would be.. One side would be Cancer.. but.. ~sighs~ I am clueless about the other side. Maybe I will think of something. Great job  rp25 |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
I'm impressed! This must have been very difficult to write, but it turned out great! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
As a fellow Sag, Kethry, I'm only going to compliment you on your poem well done...twice...and I will not even attempt to follow in your horseshod steps now... just know that I very much appreciate your having posted this...as I think I will make a lovely hanging of it! Fantastic! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I applaud your effort, Kethry, but jam on pizza???  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Liz. Thank you for the awe. The lettering wasn't hard but the internal ryhming was. And as I said the lines are too long. Rosepetals25 you could try "the crab" with a ... at the beginning of the last line. Good luck. Debbie, thanks for the impression. It was not exactly difficult but I struggled with the form and it still doesn't look right. On my original the last letters manage to stay on one line which is what I was aiming for. Aww Sunshine com'on, I was only playing. I was sooo looking forward to read what you wrote. Deer, it was originally pepperoni but I couldn't twist it to fit. Besides I wanted to see if ppl read all the poem or went into automatic response mode.  "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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