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Young Love (sestina)
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Young Love (sestina) |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida 
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Young Love Young love brief as a whisper of wind not to stay, this blustery day passions ran deep, swift as a river intense was this look of love meant to be, for a time hopes of tomorrow, but a dash The fire in her heart, was more than a dash a flame to burn, not ceased by the wind or lost somewhere in space and time she waits for his return, maybe this will be the day does his heart burn with this same love? does not love flow like a river? The heart knows no end to a river passions kiss, taste more than a drop or dash there is no greater love love never dies, no matter the wind still, she waits to this day all she has for now, is time Years pass, not mellowed by time storms brought another river her life flowed, day after day still needing love, more than a dash caught a piece of love in the wind her scattered heart needed more love Is there no heart left to bleed for love? with time comes only more time daily tossed about by the wind longing for love, swift as a river deeper than a drop in a bucket or dash still, she waits for at least one more day The sunsets in her life, she needs a brighter day no matter the age, all need love even if only in part, or a wee dash each passing day brings an end to time a circle of love is like an endless river not ended by storms, or wind Still there's time to dream each day of a swift river that ran for my first love passion more than a whisper of wind, or mere dash BloomingRose |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
whew! Rose - ya gotta turn down the heat in here, fer crying out loud! This is incredibly sweet. I really like the flow and the transitions, too. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautiful flow of your thoughts and I wonder why Love journeys the way it does...James |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A blending of romance and a sestina is one monumental effort - You've done a nice job here - Let's bring it around again..  |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Thanks all... it was really hard work putting this one together. Deb |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Deb- Sestinas are far from easy - you've done a terrific job on this - I loved it! ~Live all you can; it's a mistake not to. It doesn't so much matter what you do in particular, so long as you have your life. If you haven't had that, what have you had? ~ Henry James ~ [email protected] |
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