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He keeps me ticked!
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He keeps me ticked! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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 He keeps me ticked! Round faced monster Triple-handed ghost Cyclic, tentacle-clawed, Uniform, orchestrated In synchronised dance Each arm moving after Sixty strokes by the other At the constant rate of A measly moment a second! Hands moving sideways Like a traffic policeman, Chiding me to move Pulling me to push Willing me to budge Needling my inertia Prodding me to budge Asking me to change With the changing seasons! Bejewelled marked quartz He smiles at me wickedly And unfailingly each hour Sounds a blaring horn Irritatingly persistent, Unerringly consistent, I don't know the 'what' Of who keeps him in his tick But he surely keeps me ticked! ~*~  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ Oh, this is wonderful ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
And this my friend is exactly why this cowboy does not wear a watch. Great read my poetic genious.  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You've captured the rhythmic tick..tick..tick.. of watching time pass before us... Nice job, Sudhir..  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sudhir, Loved the little time warp at the end Be well Kethry. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Very clever, Time spent wisely is your friend, but can cause much pain and anxiety, if not used to your benifit . you've done a great job with this one, give yourself a pat on the back, and spend some sweet time being proud . L.of.L. Tom . Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
The good moments speed and the bad moments drag....I'm going to have a talk with someone about this Great work Sud!!! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Marge, wonderful suits me wonderfully well ThanksMark, Thank you.. but I think you gotta have a watch to watch Nancy, your words mean plenty... thanks Kethry, glad that you liked... Thanks Tom, great response... Thanks lemme be proud for some time butterflies... thanks a huge bunch... regards to all, Sudhir |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yeah... but you failed to mention the scream mine emits when I throw it across the room! LOL. This is great, Sudhir! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir--Love this timely piece...so cleaverly done. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent read Sudhir. |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
i'm loving the double meaning and the fresh concept  for the most part i would have never thought of time in such a way, but i can nonetheless NOT disagree with you...great job sudhir < !signature-->"my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt [This message has been edited by JnR4eva (edited 09-08-2000).] |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Sudhir, Who invented this monster anyway? I ban the watches on the weekends, at least that way there's a short reprieve Linda M. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Well done Sudhir Very funny and very clever indeed Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Don't get ticked off, Sudhir, just throw that baby out the window and let Time fly! Great work, Mr. Poet |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a most remarkable concept...what more do you have up your imaginary sleeve of tricks? This is delightful, Sudhir...well done, good man, well done! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Suthern, nice to see you here ThanksMartie, So glad that you liked this, Thanks Eloise, Thank you for coming by JnR4Eva, I think I just won a debate...  ThanksLinda, you can keep time away for some time, but not all the time... ThanksTracie, Thank you VERY much... Sir Balladeer, "Mr. Poet" WOW that makes be sit on the timeless cloud ... ThanksKarilea, it is always such a fulfilling day when I see you beaming a ray of light this way... Thank you so much, my friend... regards to all, sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 09-11-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Hands moving sideways Like a traffic policeman, Chiding me to move Pulling me to push Willing me to budge Needling my inertia Prodding me to budge Asking me to change With the changing seasons!" Oh Sudhir ... I loved this piece, forgive the pun, but it is timeless! Very cleverly penned, and such true sentiments capturing the aggravation masterfully. Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kit, Thanks a huge bunch... your words do mean a lot... regards, sudhir |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sudhir...I knew I was gonna enjoy this as soon as I saw your name beside it...what a clever tale you have told... |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I thought this wonderful, not sure what it was going to be about..and in my mind was contemplating many outcomes...thanks for allowing me some time out from the drudgery of real life... ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sorry I didn't reply sooner, but lately I just haven't had the time... *wink* Enjoyed this very much Sudhir...I do love your sense of humor! |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Sudhir, my friend ... you never cease to amaze ... this is a special one here though ... great work ... My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Paula, Thanks a huge deal for coming by to read... Maureeen, I am glad that you found some TIME-OUT... ThanksO Serene One, no need to be sorry about such petty reasons... come along any time you have TIME ThanksMA, I am delighted to see your name in the thread... Thanks regards to all, sudhir |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Sudhir Iyer, don't get ticked if I haven't had time to reply lately.... but this timely piece deserves a good read. Boy time fly's when you're haveing fun. Parker |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Parker, nothing to be ticked about it... feel rather tickled that you found some time to come by... regards, sudhir |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
I know one thing..time goes slow when you're at work! This is a very timely piece of time Sudhir...my watch is at the house...but it ain't ticking! Great work! ~*~SCG~*~ "Poetry is what makes the invisible appear"-Author Unknown |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O Sweet lavada, Thanks so much.... regards, sudhir |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Aw....thanks sudhir...you are a true friend! have you checked out my prose yet? Can it be expanded much more? I'm still awaiting your e-mail ~*~SCG~*~ "Poetry is what makes the invisible appear"-Author Unknown |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sudhir, Not sure how I missed this one, but glad I found it!! You have described the passage of time wonderfully my friend!! You know, I hate my watch, but feel lost without it!! LOL LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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