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Traces of the Butterfly
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Traces of the Butterfly |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 A meeting of destiny’s chance A melding of lost souls Slow and unsure you move on With the fragile newness of fouls Touch and pull back afraid to feel Reaching silently beyond the pain He saw only what he had to loose Leaving you to show what was to gain Words of hope in the night Became more than saving grace How could you ever have known A fight against time you would race The unforgiving clock began to tick Louder with each passing day The wick of death’s candle lit Coming to take him away You gave the love he needed most With each show of gentle heart In turn love and forgiveness bestowed Each moment a sweet work of art He showed you how to love And then how to let go An ultimate gift he requested of you Reaching to a poet’s heart you did show You allowed him to walk on Back to the angels he flew Trying desperately to keep Promises that were begged of you Through him you rained sweetness Drenched with pain and ache Your words no longer your own A new form together they take Giving wings to his spirit and soul Upon your heart his fingerprints I see From your lips I hear his voice ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ ~In loving memory of a Butterfly A Tribute to an Angel~ [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 08-02-2000).] |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
this is breathtaking...please forgive my loss for words! touching, amazing, and beautifully said. |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
wonderfully written BDC!  Tony |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Butterflies, The only thing I can say is simply beautiful. rosepetals25 |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Through him you rained sweetness Drenched with pain and ache Your words no longer your own A new form together they take Giving wings to his spirit and soul Upon your heart his fingerprints I see From you lips I hear his voice ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ ............ Butterflies~ You know how much I adore butterflies... Thanks for this most wonderful poem.... Many regards to you, Sudhir. P.S. I am now going back to read my butterfly trilogy... Thanks for reminding me to do that... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautiful flowing poetry that touches my soul...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 it will be my words that will lack to do this justice... it is poetically just that one butterfly should... pay another such a amazing tribute. thank you for this my sweet SS... know that I am touched deeply.. for you to have found such grace of inspiration from my poetry of him pays him the sweetest honor there is... He now flows thru your poets pen as well.. thank you again... this one is imprinted on my heart and makes you an angel with butterfly wings  love you much jm ~Butterflies Are Meant To Be Free~ There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Thank you all for your kind replies....I can't take credit for this though...this was a poem that truly wrote itself...I was merely the voice. Janet your poetry of him inspired this and created this piece...it is Yours, I'm the one that thanks you from the bottom of my heart~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I think this is my favorite from you--a loving and tender tribute...just beautiful! |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Butterflies~ I'll try to tell you how beautiful this is through the tears. You have done it again, m'lady. Touched my heart with your beautiful words. Thank you. Love Ya much~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A really beautiful poem. We all need our butterflies in this life. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ From the cocooning of your heart - a butterfly has emerged to wing it's way to another loving heart. You do your sister-poet proud to know that she fluttered so softly in your heart as to stir you to write this beauty. What a gentle soul you are. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
This is captivating from beginning to end. Your talent is amazing in writing this masterpiece, seriously, this is a classic and should be entered in the next Voices On The Web Book. Besides your poem "Behind The White Picket Fence, this is now my favourite poem of yours. In fact, I'm printing it out right now to have a copy to keep forever. I have re-read this piece many times over, and it gets better every time. This poem is magical, inspiring and touching. Very well written with an artistic flair that only you can bring to life. You should be very proud of your work! Take care, Melissa Honeybee< !signature--> The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 08-02-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Serenity* Thank you so much...I cherish the compliment especially with this piece, it means so much~ Terry and Brian* Thank you both for being the sweet men that you are and for reading and commenting~ Marge* Poetry that evokes poetry is a gift....you told me something very similar not long ago......now through this piece I see how amazing it is...thank you~ Melissa* Oh girl...ya made me cry! You are so sweet! It's an honor to be thought of that highly by someone, especially someone that I myself regard as one of the finest poets here....thank you from the bottom of my heart~ [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 08-02-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Holly-I know that this tribute hit home both here on earth and also to the one in heaven. Your words show the pure love of a true love but your heart shows your purity in friendship to have penned this for her in recognition of him(them)...you are truely a treasure. Beautiful and sincere as I knew it could only be. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-03-2000).] |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Everyone has expressed what I would say but I will add on and tell you that was stunning. An absolute masterpiece, and I mean that literally~ Blessed Be, Beth |
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courtney923 Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 43 |
A beautifully written work of art. I really enjoyed reading it. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Holly- This is so beautiful what you have done with your words. Couldn't resist the temptation of another go round with it. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Poem sucked, but I love the graphic!!! Of course I'm kiddin m'friend! Love the whole thing... 'specially that last line.. hmmm... looks almost familiar...  Hugs you! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* Thank you so much for your ever kind comments...they always touch my heart and on this piece especially....this one was to put it mildly.....was special~ Beth* Thank you for reading and for your comments..they truly mean alot to me~ Courtney* Thank you for your kind words and for reading~ Christopher* I'm going to tell your mom your being mean to me! Thanks.....ya big bully |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
This is sad but enlightening......beause in death we are reborn right?? Never do we hope to take an angels flight and never does an angel wish for our sight for in this life we know nothing else bestowed upon us the will to live we do not want what the angels have to give. Just a little haiku I wrote and thought it fitting here.... Julie :) |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This made my heart ache for the pain of her loss but also filled me with a sense of acceptance. I have never read anything quite like this, it was a very emotional piece that I will keep always. An Angel he is to her, that will forever remain. Jenn E |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
passing shadows passing by speechless... |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Special words for a special friend! This is awesome work my friend, it is beautiful beyond words. God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Julie* That sort of captures it.....but it's much deeper...Janet has a series of poems dedicated to Devante....this was inspiered by those. Thank you so much for your kind replies and the Haiku, I've never tried one of those Jenn E* Yes he was and is.....thank you so much for your kind replies...I appreciate them so much~ PS* You said soooooooooooo much by being speechless, thank you~ Eagle* My dear friend.....thank you so very much for your always kind replies...you know they mean the world to me. |
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Mona Lisa Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 100Halifax, Nova Scotia |
A beautiful poem. I love the use of the butterfly as a symbol. The poem speaks volumes. [This message has been edited by Mona Lisa (edited 08-05-2000).] |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Stunning... Enchanting.... I loved this...  )...Simply eloquent...I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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angelsamongus Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 70New York |
Beautiful poem Butterflies Giving wings to his spirit and soul Upon your heart his fingerprints I see From your lips I hear his voice ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ His spirit lives on and their love shines brilliantly through your words... Lori |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Absolutely beautiful writing here BDC and such a great source of inspiration. Well Done! |
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