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Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

0 posted 2000-09-07 12:29 PM

My head hurts.

But that is nothing unusual.

Yet again I can’t sleep.
it’s too damn dark in here.

But that is nothing unusual.

You’re gone.
The warmth is gone.
It’s too damn cold in here.

But that is nothing unusual.

The shadows hang like silk
from your favorite nightgown,
smooth and barley there.
But I’m by myself tonight.

But that is nothing unusual.

The ceiling fan dances and sings
mocking the silence of my home
MOCKING my restless sleep.
Yet it provides a bizarre sound track to
the tossing and turning of my insomnia.

But that is nothing unusual.

You are gone and I’m left here
to deal with the memories.
Sleep is a daydream that I never awake
from. I’m tired and I need silence.
In a crowded room alone in my bed,
your words still haunt me.

But that is nothing unusual.

Just an effigy to be disgraced,
to be defaced.
Your need for me has been replaced.

WhiteNite
Member

since 2000-04-09

Posts 241
Montgomery, AL

1 posted 2000-09-07 01:04 AM

Wow, at first I couldn't find what I was looking for in this one... but I like it. It wasn't the inspiration I was looking for but it brought back a few memories and I realized I knew exactly what you were talking about. And I don't think I could have described it any better. =) Great work. --Dave

"Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment.
Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott

One Who Understands
Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 251
Cedar Rapids, Iowa

2 posted 2000-09-07 02:42 AM

How sad. To come to the relization that you have to accept your feelings as they are.
Excellent poem.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2000-09-07 02:45 AM

Effigy~ this is so sad.......made my heart hurt for you.

-SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2000-09-07 10:02 AM

Big Sighs...I enjoy your work...and that is nothing unusual either...smile for me now.

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

5 posted 2000-09-07 10:13 AM

Excellent.

I love this - the flow, the repetition works well...

this is a great poem.

K

"He looked across the
silky surface of the Severn...
it was a famously difficult
river with fierce tides..."

From Jack Maggs

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

6 posted 2000-09-07 10:16 AM

Thanks to you all for posting. I'm glad that you enjoyed this piece.

forne_marin
Member

since 2004-04-13

Posts 140
Spartanburg, South Carolina

7 posted 2004-04-16 12:38 PM

Insomnia. This one struck a little too close to home for me. You also have some striking images, "The shadows hang like silk/from your favorite nightgown,/smooth and barely there." BEAUTIFUL. The lines about the ceiling fan--anyone with insomnia will identify with that. My favorites, though, "In a crowded room alone in my bed,". Amazing. I loved it.

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