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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Fatigue sets slowly in The weight of my sin Pressing on my soul Obscuring my goal Things are not right Reality sets in tonight We have both done wrong Silencing love's sweet song Maybe for an eternity We'll just have to see What will come next In life's preplanned text We talk some things out Instead of just shout I have somehow failed you Wish that I only knew What I could have done To be the one Somehow you failed me Now we both can see Two are now at fault Secrets locked in the vault They are part of the past I let go of them . . . at last ---------------------------------------------------- Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
LW, superb poem. . . the emotions really show in this one. . . Excellent. . . --------------------------------------------------< !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 09-05-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Letting go of the anger is probably the hardest thing you can do...but you cant really talk and be angry at the same time...knowing you both made mistakes...well thats the first step in fixing them...good luck Jenn |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Writing it down not only releases the bad emotions but can aid in finding a solution. This is a touching poem, Lone Wolf.  --...chanson~ "Music, when soft voices die, Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
The sun will rise again May it dry up your pain Rainbows will be your guide Ride them like a slide Let your own light shine Drink a little wine Read this again in a while You may get a smile Change your rainbow from blue Because that's not really you For you kisses and hugs forever But a failure I think never ~ Take cares Lone Wolf ~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ Sounds like some soul-searching, sweetie. Learning from mistakes is not a failure. 'They are part of the past I let go of them . . . at last' Good positive thought ! Hugs to you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Absolutely no failure in this LW...Letting go is survival!!! ((AW hugs)) for this one my dear friend...pull out those memories, look at them, understand them if you can, and then sweetie.....LET THEM FLY!!!! Great work!! |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
There is much wisdom and emotion in this my friend. Take care!< !signature--> "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. [This message has been edited by EagleOne (edited 09-06-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is excellent excellent writing... regards, sudhir |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
This is really good....i hear a message someone might be saying to me from my past here...great post... Julie :) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It takes a lot of courage to write something like this. No, you're not alone, we all fail. Not one of us is perfect. Just know that here, you have a place where you can come when you just don't feel you can keep your words in any longer. A place where people aren't trying to be "serious poets", although that has a place in it all, but loving, caring poets, a family of friends like they say. take care!!! Kathleen |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~This was written with pure emotion...Im glad you shared it with us!!~ ~Cherie~ |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
LW, as I read your poem my heart so went out to you. I spent most of my life feeling like a failure. But one day I realised who I am and what I am. Not a perfect person by any means but a person that deeply loves and cares for other people. There is no failure in that. And you're not a failure either hun. My marriage of 16 years ended this past Jan. And trust me I had years of anger and bitterness inside me. But I realised if I was to be free and happy ever again I had to let go too. Now I cherish the good memories and refuse to dwell on the bad. I'm so sorry for your pain and pray that God will continue to heal your heart. May He bless you and keep you in the palm of His hand. Love and hugs, Juls |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I struggle with this every day for the last week. This was really heart-wrenching, and quite good. ~Heather |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Jen......I know how difficult things have been lately for you (and John), but life is all about learning from mistakes. I don't consider that a failure. Failure would be making the same mistake twice. You know I am here if you need me. All you have to do is ask. I offer my deepest regards to you both in your time of trouble. May God bless you both. Take care, Jeffrey |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
I recently left what both of us now view as five years of complacency. Was there love? Of course. What was wrong? Neither of us know to this day. What we do know now, is that something wasn't right and that's all that really matters. No one person failed, nor was either to blame. What happened? Quite simply... life. A great and inspiring poem. Makes one look inside and take a deep breath. Thanks, Jenn. Trev. |
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