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Twisted Intent |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Like a curled and burning paper that no longer can be read, your intent is convoluted into ash of things unsaid. My intent hides well behind a mask of false acceptance. Fights to bury lonely rage and heart in bitter fragments. Two of us, or is it four that twist our lives to death? The blind ones do contribute to this game of more or less. I sweep up all the ashes, melt the wax of good intent. The mask is slightly cracked now reveal hints of what is meant. To this end, we will prevail despite obstructions, high. Too painful to stay twisted- the resolution nigh... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I sweep up all the ashes, melt the wax of good intent. The mask is slightly cracked now reveal hints of what is meant. To this end, we will prevail despite obstructions, high. Too painful to stay twisted- the resolution nigh... Wow Cat, interesting poem, intense and dark yet filled with small rays of hope, but they kind of seem a bit spiked. Ok ranting here, great verse. Sit down and bargain "Until your tongues are dry If the havoc and the shame continue We'll drown you in our putrefaction" Primo Levi |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Catalinamoon This was impressive. This was a great verse and I can't say enough about it. Garfield |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
I read this 3 times....i had to comprehend it all....VERY good....it has an awesome edge to it...I liked it!  Julie :) |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Sandra, I was very impressed with this poem. The imagery was superb and the writing excellent, my friend. Michael Proust- "Love is space and time measured by the heart" |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
catalinamoon... Yes.....I do appreciate your wonderful touch in this poem. I liked the line; "two of us, or is it four, that twist our lives to death". It probably is four!! Very well done, my dear friend! |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Cat,...such a deep and totally expressive poem you've got here. I read signs of distress and the likes and only hope that you gain all you need to be truly happy. Take care you talented little poet you. *Peace. |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Wow... cool poem. I visited your home page too. You deffiniteyl have a talent in poetry. I like the Desire poems.  --Dave"Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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