Open Poetry #9 |
Winter has to come... #3000... thank you all for everything... |
Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Winter has to come Spring brings forth Summer months and Summer urges the rain to fall; Monsoon leads to the ’Autumn' way while Autumn -- Autumn gives way to the Wintered winds. What else can I say? Winter has to come. With a charming war-cry, a young one blooms - a fresh bud peeks out at a wide wild world with smallish eyes! The world, its people appear bigger and larger and the self smaller, helpless. As infancy moves yielding adolescence - the bud uncurls its first few petals -- starts speaking, walking the first few steps, unsteady, wary, tentative, holding hands, hanging on. Juvenility changes colours from chubby cheeks to enterprising, exuberant youth; the petals now mostly uncurled denim-clad designer wear -- first love, followed by first fall. Flags of life unfurled - learning the tricks of the trade. A spouse hand-in-hand now - a flower in full bloom - all petals uncurled, as if enticing the honey bee to seat itself, leaves a sheltered home, sailing for a New World and conquer new mountains - seeking greener pastures. Middle-age blues as the outer petals curl inward in a reversed first-gear - pay raise, pot belly children's schooling stressful pressures taking toll -- happiness is a stroll in the park. Oh! Its time to retire, see sons and daughters getting married - grandchildren! Neighbours all of a sudden appear to be more like oneself -- wilting flowers, petals faded wise one thinks world is smaller than it once was - partly conquered! And then arises a dawn when everyone who loves, sheds tears, as a finality becomes a reality - The withering petals fall down like dragon's tears - brave well-disguised mask starts to drop like a snake shedding yesterday's skin. Only the tendril remains! Denuded and lonely - a walking stick with nothing to support anymore! What else can I say? Winter had to come. We, once green, turned dark, greyed, until white light of wisdom shone bright. That's when winter airs came and we went, flying with the winds as Spirits with newborn wings. The whispering winds carry souls to a distance, far away, but we can't fly forever. We'll return just as seasons change - as Winter welcomes back the Spring - to lend the colour once more, this time to another bloom, raising another war-cry world appears wider yet again… [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-31-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is truly a magnificent look at life and all the ways we grow...APPLAUSE APPLAUSE to you my friend...what a beautiful creation...and what a milestone |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir...what a beautiful unfolding through seasons and stages...reminds me of a poem I wrote once, I'll send it to you...Congratulations on your milestone...you are a treasured part of this forum! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Congrats on your 3000th post my friend. You really know how to celebrate with class and style. One of your best works for sure. I see a book submit in the future with this one..what do you think. The style, format and the cadence are all perfect. |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
wow, Life though the form of seasons done nicely. congrats on 3000 "Those who will not learn to use this instrument well cannot be saved by an expanded alphabet; they will only afflict us with expanded gibberish" ~ |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
a beautiful epic style here Sudhir ... I liked ... As infancy moves yielding adolescence - the bud uncurls its first few petals -- starts speaking, walking the first few steps, unsteady, wary, tentative, holding hands, hanging on. well done ... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Ah, Sudhir, you sentimental, elemental fool. (I mean that in the most respectful, loving way, please know.) This is a composition to last the ages, dear. Beautiful writing, so gently provocative. And most sincere congratulations on your milestone, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sudhir, Sudhir, belovedone. What a great 3000th post. Loved it, loved it, loved it, did I mention I loved it. especially The withering petals fall down like dragon's tears - brave well-disguised mask starts to drop like a snake shedding yesterday's skin. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Poetry at it's best, and as Mark says...something to be included in Book II, marked accordingly! Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
OK Sudhir, Imagine a 120 foot sign saying "WOW" and even that would not express how blown away I was by this poem. Absolutely stunning amazing excellent all these words spring to mind. But one word summed up my feelings on this poem, dumbfounded...I am dumbfounded. Sheer brilliance, and I believe that is my favourite piece to come from your pen thus far, can't wait to see where you will take us after this. Congrads on the 3000st post as well, almost forgot. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Congratulations on your 3000th post! And what a poem! A wonderful look at the seasons of life! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, You summed life in one small poem. A very difficult task and you did it all so well. |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Oh Sudhir with such style and grace you have penned a masterpiece. This is incredible. Congrats on your 3000th my friend. Juls |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
My friend, this is a beautiful 3000th post! You describe the cycle of life beautifully. Wow... 3000 is quite an accomplishment! Congrats! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Congratulations my dear friend your 3000th will go down in my history book as one of your best...yes merely "one of..." your work is amazing and I could never pick only one. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sudhir, Congratulations my friend!!! This is a magnificent poem. . . the seasons of our lives come and go like the winds. . . we only have the memories. . . Excellent. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
I agree with everyone else quite remarkable writing here, you've really showed life so well through the changing of seasons. I'm in awe of this poem absolutely beautiful. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sudhir, Wonderful writing my friend. You never cease to amaze me with your talent and ability to paint the most breathtaking scenes. Congratulations on your 3000th post!!!! Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
C O N G R A T U L A T I O N S... F E L I C I T A T I O N S ... On your 3000th post And respectfully may I say I adore this poem you have wrote... |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Congratulations and well done! It is always a pleasure to read your work. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Sudhir... I would like to add my 'congrats' to those above me!! You are such a talented writer, and I'm glad to have been able to meet you. You are surrounded by fellow writers who love you, and for good reason!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ Many seasons to lay frost upon the bough ... you've captured them so expertly. Greatly impressed with the depth of tenderness in this piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I am M O V E D I am H O N O U R E D I am F L A T T E R E D I am I N T E A R S ... ... H U G S T O A L L .... T H A N K Y O U!!! My regards, sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
We, once green, turned dark, greyed, until white light of wisdom shone bright. That's when winter airs came and we went, flying with the winds as Spirits with newborn wings. The whispering winds carry souls to a distance, far away, but we can't fly forever. We'll return just as seasons change - as Winter welcomes back the Spring - to lend the colour once more, this time to another bloom, raising another war-cry world appears wider yet again… ============================= I hope Im not too late for a dance on this one.. first of all congrats on 3000..damn!!! didnt we just say this to you on 2000..LOL and then I will simply say ... this poem is SHEER SUDHIR!!!!!!!! and that equals ... Brilliance and poetic grace... I have seen such amazing growth in your poetry since you came here... its truly been a joy to watch you grow and spread your poetic butterfly wings.... thank you for the encouraging words and for making sure I didnt miss this while I'm on break.... later-sweet-friend-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I thank you "butterfly-slippered" BRILLIANT poet of forever-existing boundless energy and enthusiasm... for coming by to read this one and then leave me with so many words of praise and honour.... Thanks and many regards to you O Janet, Sudhir |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Sudhir.....CONGRADULATIONS!!!!!!!!!!!!! You have earned no less!! Marina< !signature--> It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley [This message has been edited by Marina (edited 09-02-2000).] |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Sudhir.....CONGRADULATIONS!!!!!!!!!!!!! You have earned no less!! Marina< !signature--> It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley [This message has been edited by Marina (edited 09-02-2000).] |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
SEE!!!!!!! I got so excited I double posted!! LOL It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Congratulations on 3,000 Sudhir! What a colourful and insightful poem to mark this mileston with! Keep em' coming, and I'll keep enjoying Sudhir!!! Thank you for all your wonderful posts and responses ... I always enjoy your words! Best wishes and congratulations, /Kit |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
oh sudhir...what a beautifully written poem indeed....i enjoyed very much the passage of the seasons, contrasted with the passage of time (for us humans in a personified manner)...truly well written and congratulations for attaining on ur 3000 post . "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
3000 posts...and every one done with class and style. Congradulations, Sudhir!!! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Marina, Thank You, Thank You Thank You so very much... Kit, I am so happy that I manage to write things that are enjoyed by you.... thanks a lot JnR4Eva, It has been a pleasure to know you and your poetry... thank you Sir Balladeer, you have gifted such a great compliment... I am honoured... Thanks Regards to all, my dear friends, Sudhir |
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