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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2000-08-30 06:52 AM

(someone's hurting)
I can't forget
(someone's crying)
and I regret
knowing pain
of swollen eyes
too many tears
too many lies
(someone's pain)
in compromise...

Where is the gain?
What is the prize?
Why awaken
dog that lies?
Allow her sleep
this night in peace.
Allow her, please,
her dignity...
she has earned
the right to cry.

(someone's hurting)
No one's surprised.

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1 posted 2000-08-30 07:07 AM

Sleep deprivation works too  , this is awesome Seren!  Your heart is beautiful especially when it's reaching to a friend.  

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2 posted 2000-08-30 07:08 AM

she has earned
the right to cry.

A very touching poem, serenity.  ....chanson~

~"Music, when soft voices die,
Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley~

Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 2000-08-30 07:21 AM


regards O serene One,

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4 posted 2000-08-30 08:46 AM

serenity, I found this intriguing, sad and so full of care and concern.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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5 posted 2000-08-30 09:12 AM

serenity, I like this one. Good heart you have kind lady. Very good read & message.  
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6 posted 2000-08-30 11:17 AM

amazing, so often we all need a good cry seems like it cleanses us where we can start anew.
serenity blaze
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7 posted 2000-08-30 04:11 PM

Thanks to all...I appreciate your reading and kind comments as always...just thought it important to remember that sometimes our opinions are not as important as people's that being said, this is all that I will say:  I care.  That's all.  End of discussion for me.  Love to ALL.
Jenn E
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8 posted 2000-08-30 04:18 PM

This was very touching. And THANK YOU......we all earn the right to cry. Our bodies need to realese....Sweet words. Peoples feelings are so very important, especially other's.

Jenn E

Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 2000-08-30 04:42 PM

I liked your form here, very nicely writen and powerful

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10 posted 2000-08-30 04:51 PM

Serenity this is just beautiful.  You have touched me deeply with this poem.  Thank you very for sharing.


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley

Mark Bohannan
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11 posted 2000-08-30 07:05 PM

very powerful indeed and very heartfelt. Beautiful.

[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-30-2000).]

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12 posted 2000-08-30 07:15 PM

Yes and it's me...but I will be alright...everybody hurts sometime...crying is very necessary...James
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13 posted 2000-08-30 07:20 PM

Enjoyed it a lot!!!!!!!!!!
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14 posted 2000-08-30 07:32 PM

A great read and thanyou for sharing.


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15 posted 2000-08-30 09:32 PM

Wow.. this is a powerful piece, and beautifully written. I enjoyed it much!

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

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16 posted 2000-08-30 09:56 PM

I am very pleased with the direction you have taken with your writing. Seem to have opened up more
great poem  

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17 posted 2000-08-30 10:49 PM

A very big WOW !!!

This is so beautiful....(sigh)

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18 posted 2000-08-30 11:15 PM

I liked the poem and LOVED the comment.
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19 posted 2000-09-01 12:58 PM

Careful! I don't care that you care about caring!   Hi, S'en. I loved the gentle touch of this poem. And I'm sure Butterfly Slippers appreciates it.


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20 posted 2000-09-01 03:19 AM


   What a beautiful and thoughtful poem!
   Wouldn't it be nice if we were so aware
   of another's pain?

Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!

serenity blaze
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21 posted 2000-09-01 04:02 AM

Thanks all...heart all toasty and warm again...smiles.
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22 posted 2000-09-01 05:49 AM

     This, my dear, is a work of art.  You have touched me deeply with this.  Very powerful and compassionate poem, my dear.  ( And I am glad your heart is all warm and toasty again, too!)

Love Ya~

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

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