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The Muse's Dart
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The Muse's Dart |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
The Muse's DartUnkind are fires within the heart that rage as if untended Unkind, the mountain muse's dart to strike one undefended For high the crests of mountains thrust and high my lover's leading To follow him, oh dare I trust forsake my mind its pleading It was no more than three days last that I recall denoting just how serene my minutes passed a notion now exploding For as my lover tread the span through mountain meadow striding That muse's cursed dart did land 'pon where my heart was hiding |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Ahhhh once again the power of the poet and the weapon's we have. An arsenal with so much force we can either take one down or send them on a flight of fantasy and even launch them to the stars. Very beautiful. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
from forth the fount Castalia, springs forth fair Muse's grace. |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Claire, This is so lovely, pretty, really might better describe it, and the flow is wonderful.... Michael by Michael Auguste "But I am so like everyone<br> And everyone is so like me We cork our contents, lest they flee Until our lives are spent |
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American Princess Junior Member
since 2000-08-21
Posts 49USA |
Claire, This has such a serene and lovely feel to it. Beautiful! American Princess |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
Avery nice turn of phrase on this one... beautifully done! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mark, thank you for your thoughtful response...and yes...the power of the poet. (and her muse)  Mike Michael, thank you for the "pretty" ...that is just the effect I was after, and your comment makes me smile. American Princess, I thank you, sincerely for reading this piece, and for your very lovely comments. English Rose (I love that name!) I'm glad you found this to your liking...thank you! Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"For as my lover tread the span through mountain meadow striding That muse's cursed dart did land 'pon where my heart was hiding" Claire, this is a beautiful piece. I absolutely LOVE this one! Keep up the wonderful work! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ You haven't dodged too many muse-sent darts ! What a lovely way you have about you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
I recall when I first found this sight...I was in awe of your poetic prowess. I am glad to see that some things do not change in six long months...you still paint with pretty words a picture clear and vivid. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Ah, very lovely indeed, Claire! Denise |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
LoveBug, thank you very much for your enthusiasm. I will try my best to keep up. Miss Marge, and a lovely way you have as well, my friend. Thank you. sonjes, my sincere thanks to you this morning for your most thoughtful and generous commentary. Thank you Denise, thank you. You are a shining light! Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--That arrow has hit you time and again, lucky the tipe is laced with beautiful words. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Tremndous writing Claire, truly tremendous... regards, sudhir |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
that blasted muse never gives ya a moments peace! Great writing as usual girl...  ~H |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Martie, thank you. Unfortunately, perhaps, I've become quite skilled at hiding my heart from her aim.... Sudhir, your generous response is very much appreciated...I thank you for reading. Heather, indeed, she is busy with that bow. Thanks, Heather. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This is lovely (of course), but the finishing stanza is a true coup de grace. Caught me off guard with its simple finesse. Just keeps getting better. --Kess YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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Silkdragon Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 65 |
Meadowmuse: This was lovely, the flow was wonderful! You gave it such a pretty feeling. Only recently having discovered your poetry, I am completely in awe of your talent. Great, great job! Erin |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"For as my lover tread the span through mountain meadow striding That muse's cursed dart did land pon where my heart was hiding" --Incredible Claire, as always. I saw a struggle between ones love for another and one's love for the written word....I could be completely wrong however, lol. Anyways, wondrous work, I stand in awe yet again. *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
superb writing... love the last verse... If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Kess, Erin, Krista, Avanti... Thanks to each of you for taking time not only to read, but to comment on this piece. I'm so glad to know you found something here to enjoy. Reading your words is a nice way to start the morning. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Claire - I've learned - thru my own experience writing - That we can write realistically about unreality - (a love I don't have - etc) - I'm learning a whole new set of things about writing poetry reading your wonderful creations - (and I too especially loved that last verse ~G~) |
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