Open Poetry #9 |
Who Wants to Marry a Millionaire? (for my 2000th post) |
Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
*A little off the beaten path for me ... thought I'd stretch my pen a bit for my 2000th and try to dream up a character I actually didn't like! Who Wants to Marry a Millionaire? A balmy, warm, September morn; a sleepy, little town; She exited the diner, night-shift over, homeward bound. Instead of walking down the road that usually took her home, She hesitated, turned about, decided just to roam. And as she walked, she pondered 'bout the life that she had led, She wanted fame, she wanted wealth, but she got "this" instead. A little diner, slinging hash, the tips were small to none; She dreamed of all the many things she had not seen, not done. She wanted rings and jewelry, she wanted furs and cash; She dreamt of lavish lifestyles that she'd missed along her path. Her bitter mind was swirling 'bout the things she could not gain; She dwelled in her self-pity ... never thought she was to blame. She'd turned down many suitors who had sought her hand and lost; Though true to heart, they may have been ... they could not foot the cost. A beauty in her younger years, though underneath was not; The world, it "owed her" something, was her bitter after-thought. She walked a mile, then came upon a little wishing well; Beside it, was a park bench, where a handsome stranger knelt. She watched him as he flung a coin in to the depths below; And saw him whisper something though, she could not hear his tone. She glanced around the area, a pick-up truck she saw; And sneered at her misfortune since he drove no fancy car. She watched him for a moment and she gauged the way he dressed; Some jeans and wrinkled flannel jacket, left her unimpressed. Regardless, she just sauntered up and poured upon the charm; She just enjoyed the game, you see, there wasn't any harm. She chatted with the stranger, batted heavy-lidded eyes; She wore the face of charm and grace (a wonderful disguise). She reeled him in, enjoyed it so, was practiced at this game; For when a rich man came about, she'd win her claim to fame. She toyed with him a little more, and laughed at his delight, When she flung coin to wishing well, and prayed for Mr. Right. She saw the look upon his face, "Oh, here it comes" she sighed, He asked her out to dinner, with a smile a mile wide. The game is over, now she could complete this little jest, She buried him with one cold look; he'd clearly failed the test! She twirled upon her heel and gave a snicker as she turned, For one day all these practices would work for what she yearned. A rich man would just roll to town, she'd whisk him off his feet, She knew if she had patience, he'd be there someday, they'd see. Just then a sound of engine sputtered, and she swung around, To glance upon the stranger as his pick-up truck left town. But much to her surprise, the truck did not move further on, Instead a Lamborghini rolled out from the trees beyond. She stood in dumb-struck silence, as the stranger passed her by; And tossed a coin toward her feet ... a twinkle in his eye. /Kit McCallum [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kit~ Off the 'beaten path' indeed ! What a delightful tale you wove. Chicks like that are a dime a dozen ... and not worth the coins tossed at their feet. Nicely told .... Great job ! Congratulations on making that 2000 mark in style ! ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
WONDERFUL WEAVE KIT!!! wow..you went for it... Congrats on your milestone post... and may I say...thank you to you as I have been on the receiving end of many of your sweet, sincere, and enthusiastic replies... TY my friend take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wow, what a story Kit...loved it. Perfect ending too. Congrats on 2000...what a milestone...I've definitely a ways to go. jwesley |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I really enjoyed this..and yes I join the others in congratulating you, also... ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Kit, wooohoooo on that 2000, you go guy, LOL. The poem was too cool. Thats exactly what they all should get, those ummmm gold diggers. What a perfect ending. Loved the whole tale. Juls |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Kit, Wow, nice stretch of your pen for number 2000!!! I like this a lot!!! Congratulations on 2000 posts!!!! Way to go!!!!! Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Marge: I had fun with this one Marge ... never liked a gold digger, and thank you so much for the congratulations! ~Janet Marie: Thank you so much Janet Marie ... 'tis easy to be enthusiastic when I read such wonderful words from you my friend. ~JWesley: And miles to go before we sleep ... no idea how that 2000 crept up so quickly, just having a great time reading all the wonderful works here. Thanks JWesley! ~Maureen: Soft thank you's right back at ya Maureen, thanks so much! ~Juls: Thanks for the wonderful comment Juls ... but um, I'd better let you in on a secret ... Kit is just a nickname like Kay/Kate/Kath, shhhh don't tell anyone I'm a female OK? Thank you again for the lovely response! (smiling here) Much appreciation to all, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~LoneWolf: Ooops, you snuck in while I was replying ... thank you so much for the lovely comments and congratulations ... I'm very grateful LoneWolf! Much appreciation, /Kit |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Kit, What is there to say besides what has already been said? I loved the poem.. and the ending was superb! Congrats on 2000th post too! rosepetals25 |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
congratulations Kit ... really enjoyed this piece ... you know ... sadly ... people like this would probably not learn from the experience Rex |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Congratulations, Kit! Excellent story! Very well written, I really enjoyed this! Denise |
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Angel Sighs And Smiles Junior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 16 |
Most fantastic! Couldn't ring more true! Loved it! Good job! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Well conceived Well penned well told well versed. I'm beginning to think you're Balladeer's poet twin. This is wonderful, Kit Enjoyed reading it. I knew she would lose out in the end, but that was great Congratulations on the 2000 Your other twin Liz |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
congratulations, Kit ... 2000 and still going strong ... and speaking of strong, this is a great piece ... what fun ... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
What a poem to celebrate.... Wonderful and ditto what everbody else said too.... (escaping lazily ) Kit, Many congratulations on your 2000 ... Many regards, sudhir P.S. check out announcements forum.... |
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notlikely2 Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 308UK |
Brilliant!! And doesn't it tell the truth. Sometimes we are so wrapped up in first impressions that we forget to find out what may lie beneath. A superb piece and most worthy of your 2000th post...well done! Love is like the mumps.....the older you are, the harder it hits you! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
oh well done Kit..so very much enjoyed Thanks for the wonderful story. Congratulations on reaching 2000th...well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
what a fantastic story...with a lesson to be learned! congratulations on your 2000th post...always a wonderful job! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Some millionaires dress so casual you would never know...looks like she met one of those casual dressing millionaires...better luck next time...this was interesting in scope and presentation...congratulations on 2000...James |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
2000 posts??? It only seems like yesterday since you joined the passions family with quite an impressive first post as I recall Congratulations on post 2000 and what a grand read it was What lies behind us and lies before us are small matters compaired to what lies within us. ~Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Jenova Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 16germany |
Kit - what should I say? I'm quite speechless... this is a wonderful story... and the rhythm works out so well... may I build a shrine for you? Pretty please? =) Wow! Congrats for your 2000th post! *applauds* Jenova |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~RosePetals: Thanks so much RosePetals ... I appreciate it! ~Rex: You're probably quite right Rex, but it's nice to know they lose out at the game more often than not too ~Denise: Thank you Denise for the lovely response, much appreciation here! ~Angel: Thank you for the wonderful comment Angel, very appreciated. ~Elizabeth: Oh, that was so lovely Liz ... thanks me twin! ~MA: Thanks so much MA ... I appreciate it! ~Sudhir: You're such a sweetheart Sudhir, thank you! ~NotLikely: Wow! Thanks NotLikely ... very grateful for the warm remarks! ~Tracie: Thanks for enjoying and all the lovely words Tracie! ~PoutPrincess: Glad you enjoyed PoutPrincess ... and thanks so much! ~James: I almost took it a few different ways, but the others would have turned into a full-scale novel! Thanks James! ~Ruth: Oh Ruth, that was so nice ... thank you so much! ~Jenova: Wow! Thank you for the wonderful response Jenova! Much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Congrads on the 2000th post. An excellently written poem. wonderful piece. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kit---Wonderful! Wonderful!!!! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Congrat's Kit!!! And what a great poem to mark as your milestone...can't wait to see what 3000 looks like......say next week |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kit Kit Kit... WOW! Not at all what I expected...you surpassed any expectation I might have had... Hugs! Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Super story... HUGS |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kit, what a pleasure to read. And a very well done tale, with a surprise for her at the end. Glad I came by. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
and the moral is...... Never treat a man like a weenie He might drive a Lamborghini!! Congrats, KiT!!! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Not me...nope no way...I want a man with character not cash! Anyway, great work here, Kit! Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Kit, this was a great story. Loved the ending! Congratulations of your 2000th! |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Congratulations.... 2000 That's unimaginable to me... I loved the poem, the ending was great. I bet she picked the coin up. Linda M. |
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Kimber New Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 8Edmonton,Alberta,Canada |
Kit, how wonderful the poem is. No surprise on the praise, for you are very deserving of it! Your heart shows up in all the poetry you write, what a kind and touching heart you must have! Congrats! Kimber Life is to short to waste-so live it like it will last forever! |
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