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Taste Your Tear
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Taste Your Tear |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now 
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"TASTE YOUR TEAR" You're prettier than a soft spring rain, settling down in the morning light. And more beautiful than a wildflower, bedding itself down for the night. Follow that moonbeam over there, and watch it shine down in the twilight. Somehow it reminds me of your smile, so soft and soothing, just like a bobwhite. When I searched deeply into your being, I found all of your celestial grace. Then I stared, for you are a princess, and I looked into your lovely face. I gazed into those striking gentle eyes, barely did I contain myself, as they are so dear. I touched both of them with my loving lips, but the only thing I could taste, was all of one tear. It lay so heavy upon my trembling lips, and I could sense the sorrow from your wet skin. Like a empty pond that lived in the forest, you have been totally drained, all from within. I tasted your emptiness, and now know your vacant heart, lost inside was I, from this broken love affair. Long ago I enjoyed the rapture of cockleshells and daffodils, and there were many days, when I would follow you anywhere. So once more I stare into those very damp eyes, wondering what went wrong between you and I. The flowers are all dying and so are our hearts, and all we can do is stand here, and say goodbye. I can still taste the sadness of that lingering teardrop, as it lies heavy, on still trembling lips which fear. Can't it just fall away to the ground, and then maybe you will come back, instead of the taste, of your tear? Bill Charles |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Bill, Such a sad emotional poem...but wonderfully written as always. rp25 |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Sad, but very beautifully penned... Bill, I really enjoy your works... regards, sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Bill ... such tenderness and sorrow wrapped up in the longing behind these wonderful words. Beautiful and heartfelt!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh..this is good...so very sad though! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi rosepetals25, Yes, it is some what sad, but perhaps there will be no more tears. Thank you for your kind comments. Hi Sudhir, Thank you Sudhir for coming by. I do appreciate your most kind words. Thank you again. Hi Kit, Thanks so much for stopping by and reading this poem. It was emotional for me to write, but I finally completed it. Hi Poet deVine, Thanks for coming by, and I'm glad that you liked this poem that I have written. And yes, it is sad. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Like an empty pond that lived in the forest you have been totally drained, from within". Beautiful way to describe the emptiness we feel as love goes away... sorry that this is a time for tears...James |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bill~ Your tears have not gone unnoticed - 'It lay so heavy upon my trembling lips, and I could sense the sorrow from your wet skin.' Very longingly penned. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Bill, a beautifully written emotional piece. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Bill, your descriptions are so lovely ~ a soft spring rain settling down in the morning light, the wildflower bedding down for the night. Such tender, delicate, creative images with which you gift your reader. Thank you for this poignantly transcribed treasure. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I touched both of them with my loving lips, but the only thing I could taste, was all of one tear. soft and loving, Bill..love your heart ~~smiles Maureen |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Beautiful Bill! A very touching piece. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Bill, so very beautiful...your words left an impression and a tear or two. I am pleased not to have missed this poem...chanson~ |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Bill... This is so terribly sad....I find myself with tears in my heart from it!! You always touch my emotions with your beautiful words......... Bittersweet, my friend..... Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi James...Yes, what an emptyness it can be. Thanks for coming by once again, I do appreciate it James. Hello Marge, Thank you Marge, thank you very much. And thanks for coming by. I always appreciate your comments. hi brian, Thank you for dropping by, and for your most considerate comments. Hi Claire, All I can say is thank you so much Claire for your very kind and more than generous comments about this writing. I'm very touched. Hi MMoonchild, Thank you for coming by, and reading this poem I have written. And thank you Maureen, for your most thoughtful comments. Hello Angel, Thank you Angel, for your kind words, I do appreciate it. Hi chansondegeste, Thanks so much for your considerate and kind words. I am very glad that you did come by and read this writing of mine. Chanson, you're too kind. |
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