Open Poetry #9 |
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Hand In Hand |
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Brandyn Sand Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 82Columbia, SC ![]() |
You and I, my love, together are one - Just like the sky and the morning sun. I am the torch, you are its fire; You are the current, I am the wire. Apart we would be like a bird without flight, A rose void of scent, the day without night. Who has experienced great joy without laughter Or a memorable tale with no. . . ever after? And just as there is no land without sea, I cannot imagine a you without me. For R, the love of my life. You've only been gone for a couple of hours, yet I miss you so much already. ![]() |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Fabulous poem. I liked the comparisons. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Brandyn - this poem is so tight! And that is meant in a good way. The similes are so right om the mark, and it all ties together perfectly, including the order in which it is all written. Terrific writing, lady. |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Brandyn~ Enjoyed the thoughts. Particularly this - 'You are the current, I am the wire.' Now is that anyway to conduct yourself ! ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Brandyn Sand Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 82Columbia, SC |
K & L - thank you so very much for the kind words. And, Marge, that was just too cute! ![]() |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I loved this..very beautiful walking hand in hand... ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Brandyn , a beautiful and tender poem, very romantic. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
what a beautiful poem you have here...i just find the comparisons remarkablely sweet and heartfelt, and overall..i just think it's just beautiful...i hope he comes back soon to you ![]() "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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