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Open Poetry #9

What can I write...

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-08-26 04:04 AM

What can I write of the parks, where the grass was greener,
of the alleys, the school and the metro?--
What would you see, when to you, my dear reader,
even the present seems to be retro?
Thus when writing above the parallels of gray rails,
I cannot satisfy you with the feeling
which the gray memory of my past still unveils.
When I stare at the ceiling,
I can see two shadows in the process of making
love, just as fervid and earnest
as the original copy. I can feel my soul shaking.
Like the flame in the furnace,
she gave off such warmth! which, alas, you shall never
obtain from paper alone, even by burning.
And only by being idle, do I achieve what I’ve endeavored--
evoking in you the bottomless yearning.

Check out my poetry here:

http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-08-26 06:09 AM

This is wonderful, Master! Very well written!

Denise

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

2 posted 2000-08-26 12:42 PM

Master, you have a true gift in word...I hope that you realize that. This is a remarkable piece...each image, alive.

~ Claire

(on my way to your website...and you are welcome to mine)

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Dawn Eclipse
Senior Member

since 2000-01-31

Posts 637
The Horsehead Nebula

3 posted 2000-08-26 03:24 PM

a truly magnificent piece. Wonderfully written.

"Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today"
~Broadway Musical RENT~

*Cassandra Roseen*

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2000-08-26 05:13 PM

Master~
Some truly wonderful thoughts and images
spread throughout this piece.
Quite the talent you possess.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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