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mine own eyes
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mine own eyes |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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His words are still warm in my heart as I brush the sleep from my eyes my hand brushes lips I'm awake in surprise to find I start this day smiling. Just to think that he might be just a little fond of me... makes wonder I just might be okay, after all... through the crumple of sheets, and brushing of teeth, I startle myself with a glimpse mine own eyes-- like the rustle of curtain, the flicker of shade, in a house dusty and silent, the owner away, I startle myself as I think-- someone's there... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O Serene One, you see poetry in everything that moves and even in everything that doesn't move... you find poetry in everything that is... wonderful... regards, sudhir |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Hello serenity. Your poem is so peaceful and touching. A lovely wake-up read this morning  ...chanson~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sudhir and chanson, I thank you much--just read this half asleep poem and I'm half laughing now, I wonder, is it a good thing or a bad thing to be startled by signs of life in your own eyes...methinks I worry too much...thank you, yawning and smiling, off now for coffee and poetry... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Just to think that he might be just a little fond of me... change the he to a she and I know just how you feel.... been there...  |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wow oh wow! I had to read this through a time or two, to allow the spooky magic of it to sink in! LOL I can see this, I really can. And yes, it is okay to see life in one's own eyes...it's completely ok. "It's about darn time," I've said to myself in the mirror before! LOL This is a really unique piece here, the style, even the content. Gives that wonderful scent of a new beginning...aaahhh. Thanks for sharing! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Serenity...you are writing my heart with this one...something so new so beautiful that its kinda hard to belive just yet... |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
serenity, I loved this...I could "see" everything you described. Such a nice poem Michael |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) I loved this.....amazing what the heart of another can bring to us.....beautiful work~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you muchly...the joy is mine, today... Grateful as ever, for all of your thoughtful replies...Hugs to all. |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Great I loved it. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Serenity,...*sigh*. Where do I begin? This is umm...it's ...so...I don't know,...real to me. I'm saving this one. Aaghh!!! You've nailed this. Please take care you. *Peace. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity--I really enjoyed this look into your morning mirror and your heart...sometimes we see ourselves so much we forget to really look. |
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