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Devotion
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Devotion |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA 
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I wake up every morning And crave to smell your hair To feel you lay beside me Just empty space is there I thought that I was over the pain of love so lost But every time your mentioned My heart turns into frost It hardens deep inside me No relief for it in sight Afraid of all the yearnings Afraid of living life Each day that passes over I try to keep in view But everything is distant My thoughts are back on you The memories are fading And all they leave are doubt This life that I am leading Has strayed off of its route So forgive me if I’m whining These thoughts I’ll not pretend Show any signs of healing This love just will not mend I’ll let this continue burning Condemn my soul to be Lost and ever lonely You meant the world to me We were not just a passing I’ve looked at this my best For such pain continues lasting I’ve no more time for rest Move forward with the notion And let my pain subside Give up on this devotion Stop feeding myself lies Our time together is over And now its time to go. |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
written from the heart with a smooth rhythmic flow..I enjoyed this a lot  thanx for the read"my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hugs and love to you. I know it sounds like a cliche'--but one day at a time...e me if ya need an ear.((((Rich))))) Smiles to you. Still your buddy. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Thank you JnR4eva I really appreciate your support Thank you also Serenity I'll keep the ear thing in mind Rich |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Good rhythm - glad you came to your senses there at the end!!  )-jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
can't really say I've come to my senses but getting there jaimie. Thanks Rich |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Spiked, this piece says so much about the struggles of lost love, and abrupt endline made an effective symbolic impact. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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