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Winter Winds..(married fifty years)
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Winter Winds..(married fifty years) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Temperature's falling feels like my soul is dead can't get my thoughts together inside this troubled head. Winter winds are howling there's a sleepless night ahead thinking how I miss her lying in this lonely bed. I look around in a daze and I think through my fears I remember holding her her scent is in the air. Now winter winds are howling and all the windows moan I'm left with no solution in this lonely room. Another night she haunts me I hear her everywhere Staring at the ceiling I see her smiling there. Another night I'm dying slowly my heart wears and winter winds are howling howling everywhere. The fire for joy is darkened by sorrow since she's been gone every hour is so hollow. She warmed up the nights she filled up the days now winter winds are howling since she's been called away. This is a poem I wrote about a man at Yo Ho lake who lost his wife to the final sleep. After fifty years of marriage he was lost. Many of us have had to try and comfort him but it's not easy after all that time. God rest his soul. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ What a caring and sharing. I can understand the loss he feels ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Another night she haunts me I hear her everywhere Staring at the ceiling I see her smiling there. Another night I'm dying slowly my heart wears and winter winds are howling howling everywhere. The fire for joy is darkened by sorrow since she's been gone every hour is so hollow. She warmed up the nights she filled up the days now winter winds are howling since she's been called away. ===================== oh Ethome this is wrenching... bone chilling... heart haunting writing... my goodness you wrote this so very well. its obvious this man touched you deeply.. you and your kind soul shine in this jm |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Marge he really is a fine gentleman and worth the time. |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Ethome, what a beautiful heart I see in you. Such a lovely thing you did for someone you care for. Loved this very much. Juls |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
ethome- this is a fine piece of verse... LOL... as if i'd expect anything less of you... each stanza is well written and speaks so clearly of the love and loss... very well done, my friend... i think your comment at the end which referred to "the final sleep" was great verbiage... perhaps you could write a poem called "the final sleep"??? hey... i know you're busy and everything... hehe.. but thought i'd echo your words and let you know that i think that phrase might just spark some seriously fine poetry from you.. thanks for a great read  ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Wonderful title for this piece... such a tissue moment. It's beautiful, sad, but beautiful. I especially like... "Another night she haunts me I hear her everywhere Staring at the ceiling I see her smiling there." -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
So sad when the bond is broken between two that were lovers, companions, connected for so many years, and now one is gone, leaving the other with a future of loneliness and sorrow...you have expressed it well....James |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this was very beautiful Ethome. Words are so sad but so beautiful. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Janet for the bone chilling wrenching comments I'm so glad you dropped in to take this one in. I think you can probably see the blues in it. Thanks Juliet for your words you are so kind. Doreen I will keep that in mind maybe it will make a poem. Other than that thanks for dropping in to read I appreciate your comments so much. Thanks Ladysixstring for feeling touched by this poem it has a special meaning to me. Thanks again! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
ethome, compassion is when your heart strings sing for another's... well done, my friend... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you James...yes it is sad when that bond is broken. Thank you once again! Thanks Rosebud for your kind words, much appreciated. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Sunshine for the vote of confidence ..much appreciated. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This one sure does tug at those heartstrings. Man, the loneliness just reaches out and grabs you through this piece. God bless his soul indeed to have some peace. You guys are great to stick by him like that! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
ethome, this is a wonderous and tragic piece. I really enjoy the way you write. You writing so easily fits into song verse to me, which makes it even more enjoyable. Parker |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ethome, this is a compelling piece to say the least... very lucid, and emotion-evoking... great work... regards, sudhir |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
ethome...such a friend you are to feel his ache...this is well there are no words for what this is...you have touched this girls heart AGAIN... Yesterday is gone...tomorrow may never happen...we only ever have today |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much WD for you comments I really appreciate them so much... I have lots of time for this fine older gentleman. Thanks Parker I guess that's just my style after years of writing lyrics it's the way it comes out..thanks again much appreciated! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--You write with such empathy of spirit...and you write so well. |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
I send my deepest regards to this fellow. And to you ethome you have written a beautiful piece, truly inspirational this man must be. "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Sudhir I appreciate the emotion evoking comment I know you have been to the same emotional place one way or another. Thanks Paula it's one of things that make us all human and we have the need to fulfill our hearts cares. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
ET - Well, you've really touched the sentimental part of me with this poem. I feel the loss almost personally, and yet Lorelei gives me everything to live for. Conflicting emotions. Its only because you expressed the loss so very well. Great poem! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You have shown your heart and you have done it with "ethome" perfection. This is to say the least a very emotional piece and you are a true spirit of hope left in this unforgiving world. I applaud your heart and character as well as your talent today. |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
WOW ethome...awesome writing... so good...and what a nice thing to do... awesome! Tony |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks JnR4eva I appreciate your comment so much. Thank you so much Martie I think you know how much I love your poetry and your kind responses. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you John I really appreciate! Thank you Mark it's not a hard thing to do when you're heart is in it. |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
Such a difficult thing to achieve...sadness and beauty. One almost begins to envy the man his loving lifetime. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very, very pretty, my friend. Fifty years is a long time, especially when you have to give it up thought no thought of your own. Fifty years of love is a lifetime. I envy them. You've done a wonderful job in presenting it. Reminds me of a piece of my own...only covered 25 years, but younger people don't realize...love matures...physically, mentally, emotionally...if they just hold it together long enough, and don't throw it away on relatively petty things. Again...wonderful piece. jwesley --- Casual Love Twenty-five years ago love was hot, and fierce; animal lust that fired desire; burning passion that screamed for release. Ten years ago, it had mellowed some, become an ache in the loins, a tingling of the skin, a flush that warmed the body; a closeness that carressed , and touched, and believed. And just last night... love was beautiful, and wonderful, an experience beyond all else, complete, and total, a melding of body and spirit, true, and forever. Casual love, forever love, love that will last, and last, fulfilling, and unfettered, love exceeding all we ever knew. Casual love, heavenly love, such love I have for you. w.james beard,jr. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
I think that losing your mate of 50 years would be akin to losing your soul. How does one go on without their soul-mate? Beautiful writing, my friend..... Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
A very loving post from your heart, beautifully written. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Tony for the awesome word. Thank you English Rose for the sadness and beauty comment. Thank you jwesley... yes fifty years is a long time...and thank you for the Casual Love poem it is very well done why don't you post it. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Though heart wrenching, this is a beautiful piece, fully exposing your love and your compassion for others. Very well written Liz |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Sunny...yes it would be like losing your soul....thanks again. Thanks Gemini for your kind words. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Elizabeth it's always so nice to hear from you. Heart wrenching is the way to explain it after fifty years of marriage. |
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