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ethome
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0 posted 2000-08-20 12:39 PM



Temperature's falling
feels like my soul is dead
can't get my thoughts together
inside this troubled head.
Winter winds are howling
there's a sleepless night ahead
thinking how I miss her
lying in this lonely bed.

I look around in a daze
and I think through my fears
I remember holding her
her scent is in the air.
Now winter winds are howling
and all the windows moan
I'm left with no solution
in this lonely room.

Another night she haunts me
I hear her everywhere
Staring at the ceiling
I see her smiling there.
Another night I'm dying
slowly my heart wears
and winter winds are howling
howling everywhere.

The fire for joy
is darkened by sorrow
since she's been gone
every hour is so hollow.
She warmed up the nights
she filled up the days
now winter winds are howling
since she's been called away.


This is a poem I wrote about a man at Yo Ho lake who lost his wife to the final sleep. After fifty years of marriage he was lost. Many of us have had to try and comfort him but it's not easy after all that time. God rest his soul.

© Copyright 2000 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2000-08-20 12:52 PM


ETHome~
What a caring and sharing.

I can understand the loss he feels ...
~*Marge*~


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Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-08-20 01:36 PM


Another night she haunts me
I hear her everywhere
Staring at the ceiling
I see her smiling there.
Another night I'm dying
slowly my heart wears
and winter winds are howling
howling everywhere.

The fire for joy
is darkened by sorrow
since she's been gone
every hour is so hollow.
She warmed up the nights
she filled up the days
now winter winds are howling
since she's been called away.
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oh Ethome this is wrenching...
bone chilling...
heart haunting writing...
my goodness you wrote this so very well.
its obvious this man touched you deeply..
you and your kind soul shine in this
jm

ethome
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3 posted 2000-08-20 01:59 PM


Thanks Marge he really is a fine gentleman and worth the time.
juliet_2u
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4 posted 2000-08-20 02:30 PM


Ethome, what a beautiful heart I see in you. Such a lovely thing you did for someone you care for. Loved this very much.
Juls

doreen peri
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5 posted 2000-08-20 02:59 PM


ethome- this is a fine piece of verse... LOL... as if i'd expect anything less of you... each stanza is well written and speaks so clearly of the love and loss... very well done, my friend...

i think your comment at the end which referred to "the final sleep" was great verbiage... perhaps you could write a poem called "the final sleep"??? hey... i know you're busy and everything... hehe.. but thought i'd echo your words and let you know that i think that phrase might just spark some seriously fine poetry from you.. thanks for a great read  

~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~

ladysixstring
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6 posted 2000-08-20 03:04 PM


Wonderful title for this piece... such a tissue moment.  It's beautiful, sad, but beautiful.  I especially like... "Another night she haunts me I hear her everywhere Staring at the ceiling I see her smiling there."

-jaimie
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JamesMichael
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7 posted 2000-08-20 03:19 PM


So sad when the bond is broken between two that were lovers, companions, connected for so many years, and now one is gone, leaving the other with a future of loneliness and sorrow...you have expressed it well....James
Rosebud1229
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8 posted 2000-08-20 04:01 PM


this was very beautiful Ethome. Words are so sad but so beautiful.
ethome
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9 posted 2000-08-20 04:36 PM


Thank you Janet for the bone chilling wrenching comments I'm so glad you dropped in to take this one in. I think you can probably see the blues in it.

Thanks Juliet for your words you are so kind.

Doreen I will keep that in mind maybe it will make a poem. Other than that thanks for dropping in to read I appreciate your comments so much.

Thanks Ladysixstring for feeling touched by this poem it has a special meaning to me. Thanks again!

Sunshine
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10 posted 2000-08-20 04:49 PM


ethome, compassion is when your heart strings sing for another's...

well done, my friend...

ethome
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11 posted 2000-08-20 07:44 PM


Thank you James...yes it is sad when that bond is broken. Thank you once again!

Thanks Rosebud for your kind words, much appreciated.

ethome
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12 posted 2000-08-21 07:07 AM


Thank you Sunshine for the vote of confidence ..much appreciated.
WhtDove
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13 posted 2000-08-21 10:00 AM


This one sure does tug at those heartstrings.
Man, the loneliness just reaches out and grabs you through this piece.

God bless his soul indeed to have some peace. You guys are great to stick by him like that!

Parker
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14 posted 2000-08-21 10:26 AM


ethome, this is a wonderous and tragic piece. I really enjoy the way you write. You writing so easily fits into song verse to me, which makes it even more enjoyable.

Parker

Sudhir Iyer
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15 posted 2000-08-21 10:28 AM


Ethome, this is a compelling piece to say the least... very lucid, and emotion-evoking...

great work...

regards,
sudhir

Paula Finn
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16 posted 2000-08-21 10:32 AM


ethome...such a friend you are to feel his ache...this is well there are no words for what this is...you have touched this girls heart AGAIN...

Yesterday is gone...tomorrow may never happen...we only ever have today

ethome
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17 posted 2000-08-21 11:47 AM


Thank you so much WD for you comments I really appreciate them so much... I have lots of time for this fine older gentleman.

Thanks Parker I guess that's just my style after years of writing lyrics it's the way it comes out..thanks again much appreciated!

Martie
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18 posted 2000-08-21 12:06 PM


ethome--You write with such empathy of spirit...and you write so well.
JnR4eva
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19 posted 2000-08-21 02:19 PM


I send my deepest regards to this fellow.  And to you ethome you have written a beautiful piece, truly inspirational this man must be.

"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me



ethome
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20 posted 2000-08-21 03:52 PM


Thanks Sudhir I appreciate the emotion evoking comment I know you have been to the same emotional place one way or another.

Thanks Paula it's one of things that make us all human and we have the need to fulfill our hearts cares.

LngJhnAg
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21 posted 2000-08-21 03:57 PM


ET - Well, you've really touched the sentimental part of me with this poem.  I feel the loss almost personally, and yet Lorelei gives me everything to live for.  Conflicting emotions.  Its only because you expressed the loss so very well.  Great poem!
Mark Bohannan
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22 posted 2000-08-21 04:03 PM


You have shown your heart and you have done it with "ethome" perfection.  This is to say the least a very emotional piece and you are a true spirit of hope left in this unforgiving world.  I applaud your heart and character as well as your talent today.
T McCoy
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23 posted 2000-08-21 04:07 PM


WOW ethome...awesome writing...
so good...and what a nice thing to do...
awesome!  

Tony

ethome
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24 posted 2000-08-21 04:42 PM


Thanks JnR4eva I appreciate your comment so much.

Thank you so much Martie I think you know how much I love your poetry and your kind responses.

ethome
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25 posted 2000-08-22 10:48 AM


Thank you John I really appreciate!

Thank you Mark it's not a hard thing to do when you're heart is in it.

English Rose
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26 posted 2000-08-22 11:50 AM



Such a difficult thing to achieve...sadness and beauty. One almost begins to envy the man his loving lifetime.

jwesley
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27 posted 2000-08-22 12:21 PM


Very, very pretty, my friend. Fifty years is a long time, especially when you have to give it up thought no thought of your own. Fifty years of love is a lifetime.  I envy them.

You've done a wonderful job in presenting it.

Reminds me of a piece of my own...only covered 25 years, but younger people don't realize...love matures...physically, mentally, emotionally...if they just hold it together long enough, and don't throw it away on relatively petty things.

Again...wonderful piece.

jwesley

    ---


Casual Love

Twenty-five years ago
love was hot,
and fierce;
animal lust
that fired desire;
burning passion
that screamed
for release.
Ten years ago,
it had mellowed some,
become an ache
in the loins,
a tingling of the skin,
a flush that warmed the body;
a closeness
that carressed ,
and touched,
and believed.
And just last night...
love was beautiful,
and wonderful,
an experience beyond all else,
complete,
and total,
a melding of
body and spirit,
true,
and forever.
Casual love,
forever love,
love that will last,
and last,
fulfilling,
and unfettered,
love exceeding all
we ever knew.
Casual love,
heavenly love,
such love
I have for you.

w.james beard,jr.

Sunnyone
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28 posted 2000-08-22 01:01 PM



  I think that losing your mate of 50 years would be akin to losing your soul. How does one go on without their soul-mate?  Beautiful writing, my friend.....


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Gemini
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29 posted 2000-08-22 01:06 PM


A very loving post from your heart, beautifully written.
ethome
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30 posted 2000-08-22 04:19 PM


Thank you Tony for the awesome word.

Thank you English Rose for the sadness and beauty comment.

Thank you jwesley... yes fifty years is a long time...and thank you for the Casual Love poem it is very well done why don't you post it.

Elizabeth Santos
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31 posted 2000-08-22 09:02 PM


Though heart wrenching, this is a beautiful piece, fully exposing your love and your compassion for others.
Very well written
Liz

ethome
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32 posted 2000-08-22 10:46 PM


Thank you Sunny...yes it would be like losing your soul....thanks again.

Thanks Gemini for your kind words.

ethome
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33 posted 2000-08-23 06:03 AM


Thanks Elizabeth it's always so nice to hear from you. Heart wrenching is the way to explain it after fifty years of marriage.
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