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Quinella's Dream, Quinella's Fantasy [Part IV]
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Quinella's Dream, Quinella's Fantasy [Part IV] |
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Sunshine
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Quinella's Dream, Quinella's Fantasy [Part IV] [Story so far - Quinella dreams of a Knight; she shares the vision with her mother; her wish is to dream of him again, and she visits the Wizard so that he might cast a spell so that Quinella dreams of her Knight once again.] O sweetly soured draught of bitterness, thy bite stings, but be at thy liberty to bring to me a dream's worthy Knight Quinella falls into a deep slumber, and dreams… O benevolent Lord, 'tis darkness all 'round my shoulders and lost, bewildered am I in tunnels cold and I abide, isolated ~ cannot you heed mine heart's measure? should thee not wish to attend to mine warmth? would thou deny mine lips? will thou abstain from mine song? but hear, there, a sound a noise, footsteps coming to me, O perchance it shall be thee, shall I gaze upon thy face, ah Moonlight, lightsome my way till a comet hide from darkness another O a love, my beloved, I entreat do not have a brother come to me, find me here in the dark, heed my voice my voice! I cannot hear my voice, but I hear myself call to thee… Oh maman, O maman! He comes! I hear thy footsteps, he comes ~ he must! O Sir Knight, good Knight I glimpse in dark shadows a spirit's form is't thou? I pray, I beg you, hear me! hear my heart O heart that tender did thy touch touch deep… whilst I slept… O to know thou arms that once bound me O maman, I see him! He comes… I shall wish he gaze and see mine soul resting in mine green eyes… but it is not thy footstep good Knight, not thine O bitter spell, fuddles my head thy image be blurred, I only spy shadows O, thy step, so close please see my hand in this caliginous gloaming I clutch thy cloak precious Knight's raiment of velvet cloth so well it shields your virtue… unmask thy face, sweetness (O, he would be my sweetest heart's love…) let me see thy elegance and let your resonant voice lift my soul… Quinella lifts the shroud from the spirit visitor's face and screams….. Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Hey, I enjoyed these 4 pieces and am looking forward to the rest. I'm glad, too, that I didn't see them till these 4 were already done as I got to cheat a little and read them all one after the other so didn't have to wait between....hee hee. Really neat. And thank you, too, for the link...wow...I spent 4 hours just browsing reference sources for eveything under the sun! And still have not touched near everything there. Wonderful!! jwesley |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Simply amazing. . . just amazing. . . I really can't think of another word Karilea. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
DON'T STOP THERE!!!!!!!! -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Can't wait for the end. *L* |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Just excellent!! give me more more more!! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Quinella lifts the shroud from the spirit visitor's face and screams….. I guess I just visited Quinella's dreams... serpent nosed, devil masked, wolf fanged, vulture beaked death clawed... Of course she'd be scared enough to scream... a gleaming false tooth a fagin dressed truth under the garbed silhoutte in a Prince charming's jet... ..... I WANT MORE I WANT MORE I WANT MORE ... This is fantastic, such a weave, such flow, such a charm to the poem and why not, it is coming right from sunshine... regards Karilea... sudhir... P.S. seymour, don't ask for the end... please... I selfishly seek this to be a never-ending story...  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh, my! James, I don't care how you read them, I only care that you enjoyed them! Thank you! I am glad you're enjoying the website reference...read on! Sven, that is encouragement enough, my thanks... ladysixstrings [great name...] OK... Sy...working on it... ethome, coming...patience... Sudhir, great lines! And, perchance this dance should wind down, another story will come 'round... thank you all... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
okay....how did I miss this one. I live here for petes sake....I am so glad I found it.....your tale is never ending pleasure......thanks and patiently waiting in my corner still. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mark, hee hee...perhaps even masterpieces [LOL] have a passionate plummet all their own...so much to read, so little time... Will be working on V today... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Hey Mark! Save a spot for the rest of us ok?? Sunshine. . . you know that we won't let Quinella face this alone. . .  ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Gentle people, meet Wizard Nor, Part V is now a part of Passions... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Building suspense! Loving it!  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Okay. Building up all that lovely suspense about her dream Knight as she falls into a deep sleep and dreams of . . . Him? Not so fast. Hold on. There's something not exactly going according to plan. Good tease. Excellent actually. ~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~ |
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