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A Sylvan Dance in Fields of Clover
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A Sylvan Dance in Fields of Clover |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon 
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in his mind's eye he could see her as his memory and desires played Prospero with his longing heart she, the ballerina of the sun hands raised heavenward beseeching the sky her voice jubilant in her abandon as she turned a pirouette in her sylvan dance upon a stage of verdant clover fields while the sun played a game of hide and seek with the threatening rain it's gentle fingers, the stage lights glowing through her gossamer-like dress etching the curve of her breast and the flare of her hip into his very soul and as the heavens liberated the summer rain her face upturned to the sky with eyes closed while droplets of rain caressed her torrid skin in ardent dewy kisses she beckoned to him to join her luring him with her sylphan smile to a concurrent destiny in aestival choreography upon a verdant dance floor in fragrant fields of clover [This message has been edited by X Angel (edited 08-19-2000).] |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Toe tingling wonderful... "while the sun played a game of hide and seek with the threatening rain it's gentle fingers, the stage lights glowing through her gossamer-like dress etching the curve of her breast and the flare of her hip into his very soul" being absolutely Fantastic!!! -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is incredibly lovely! Like reading lace made of words...your images are superb! I really could see this lovely creature dancing on the page!  |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Oh, man, Heather! This is great! But, I didn't know that women realize what sunlight shing though a dress does to a man's insides - turns us to jelly, and melts us every time we open that memory and take another look. This is a great poem, Hether! I can see the dance, and feel the emotions it brings to me. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"etching the curve of her breast and the flare of her hip into his very soul" this is so very very beautiful, heather... it's an awesome read... great writing!  |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Heather, I don't know where you pull some of your inspiration. P'raps it's best that you keep it a secret, so you can draw more upon it to create such exquisite verse like this one. Smooth, flowing, and slightly erotic, these dancers dance wherever rain falls. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I have to agree with the above comments... this is a wonderful flowing example of beauty in verse...very well done!! |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I loved writing this, in part because I had to take a viewpoint other than my own...so it was a struggle, and I had to work hard to get the feeling right. (my poor thesaurus, it's pages were smokin'!!) Thanks so much guys, your comments showed me that it was worth the effort ~Heather |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hm... sounds good to me... a concurrent destiny.... This makes me think of the mermaid.... but she's doing a sylvan dance this time..  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Wow x angel this is breath taking, beautiful very beautiful. "Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis |
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