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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-08-18 10:32 AM


Quinella’s Dream [Part 1]

to sweeten thy dream
woulds’t thou be?

I beckon

may be there be
a You?

O yon dream of, O true lad
would there be, O, a You?

ah Moonlight, lightsome my way
till a comet hide from
darkness another

O a love, my beloved, I entreat
do not have a brother

I have seen thy mask
o Love
I know thy spirit true

rest with me awhile my love
come, let us renew…

for there be a dream
inner my heart
not so apart

from thine

oh my love,
deliver……..

bells toll thy darkest hour comes

sun’s light will then
warm soon thy expression

my fancy of thy face
of thy embrace
still chaste, beloved,

and vanished with
moon’s light beam.


~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

To be continued….

18 August 2000
©Karilea Rilling Jungel



© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 2000-08-18 10:34 AM


waiting for part 2...
...waiting for part 2...
... ... waiting for part 2...

(caught in a loop... get me out ... by posting the part 2)

regards,
sudhir

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2 posted 2000-08-18 10:44 AM


Sudhir, quick, grab a beam
of moonlight and pull self
out of loop...

may be a day or two...

Mark Bohannan
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3 posted 2000-08-18 10:49 AM


I am with Sudhir......where is part 2.......is it Sunday yet?  Come on where the heck is it. (drumming fingers)(heavy sighs)come on girl.....what is keepin ya......

What a wonderful verse.  You amaze me endlessy but you already new that didnt you?
-----------------------------------------------------------still waiting.

Sunshine
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4 posted 2000-08-18 10:53 AM


Mark, patience be thy virtuous shield
and waylay me not on the path
but gloriously refrain thy wrath
"soon"...

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
5 posted 2000-08-18 11:10 AM


Yes ma'am---sitting in corner quietly now.
doreen peri
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6 posted 2000-08-18 11:13 AM


really great lines here, K

"rest with me awhile my love
come, let us renew…"

"sun’s light will then
warm soon thy expression"

this begs to be read several times... enjoyed  

~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~

Sunshine
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7 posted 2000-08-18 11:43 AM


Mark, patience is it's own reward, see II...

doreen, thank you! Having one pluck out lines of favor favors one!

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8 posted 2000-08-18 12:00 PM


Why I read part 2 first... I don't know.  Maybe for the same reason some people read the last chapter of a book first... ???  These are really wonderful... keep em comin!!

-jaimie
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9 posted 2000-08-18 12:09 PM


Part III...at your bequest....

and thanks Jaimie...so long as you enjoy them...

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10 posted 2000-08-18 10:28 PM


WOW!!

Just amazing. . . I'm running out of words here Karilea. . . just wonderful. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Sunshine
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11 posted 2000-08-18 10:36 PM


Sven, WOW thrills me, thank you...
Christopher
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12 posted 2000-08-28 06:14 AM


Beautiful, strong start. You've set a pace here, which I hope you can maintain! *wink*
JerryPat2
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13 posted 2011-02-08 08:28 PM


An entreaty to a fair one, promising honesty. I like this part, "I have seen thy mask / o Love / I know thy spirit true"

Beautiful words and the beginning of love's saga.

~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~

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