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bobbi New Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 9USA |
I'm still thinking of you The look in your eyes The smile on your face I want them to myself I want to float across the world To where you are Just to watch you Watch you drink a beer Share a smile And have a smoke I don't want to hurt you I just want to be near you And let these feelings explode |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Bobbi welcome to Passions...hooked on loving this one person..well you described it very well...good job! |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Very "real life". I enjoyed this. -jaimie http://www.ladysixstring.com |
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bobbi New Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 9USA |
Thanks to you both... I wouldn't really call it hooked on loving her, but hooked on her yes. Its always the ones you can't have i think. |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Person described in this poem makes me picture a US Navel person. Don't ask me why, I guess it's the imagery of "floating across the world, drinking a beer, sharing a smile and a smoke." This poem seemed very real to me. Very good. Garfield |
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sarahC Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 84Michigan |
The world is a very small place...to float to her would be a small price to pay....I loved the poem....and believe me the feelings seem to already be exploding in your writing.....  |
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