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A Song of Gold
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A Song of Gold |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I don't know anything anymore. But I know the sound of a slammed door. A fool to knock my fingers sore, and feel the slap and beg for more. There must be something sick in me, to make me stand here helplessly, for glimpse of possibility--- I saw in you what you could be. And even though your heart beats cold, I'll sing for you, a song of gold. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Serenity this has some powerful lines and such a independent but beautiful rebuttal...very well done! Aw the passion of my Louisana Acadian friend write on mon cherie! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Damn you ethome, you summed up my exact feelings about the poem, I will just add a very deserving EXCELLENT. "Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
what am I gonna do with my baby girl... not a fool me twin... a poet ..an AWESOME POET ... who wrote this kick butt lil ditty.. SY-guy better watch out Sen's coming up fast on his grace of rhyme and last to line impact. very cool me sweet ...VERY *kisskiss* me |
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Knight Dreams Junior Member
since 2000-08-16
Posts 46Austin, Texas |
You have shown well what love of another can do. Simple and direct. Very good |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Starting to show that inner strength fighting back....and it looks as if you are going to win. Wonderful verse full of power and conviction. |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Serenity I don't know how to say it, but this is a great piece. Although this may not be what you were writing about, I picture an abusive relationship with the abused having such strong love for the abuser, that she believes that this will conquer all. The way you penned this will make people think if they hang onto every word as I did. Again, great work. Garfield |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Serenity I agree with Garfield. You certainly captured all of the emotions in a few lines. didi |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Serenity,...ggrrr. You are making me feel your words writing like this. Powerful. Awesome. You certainly can capture a feeling and splash it on us well. You can read THIS one. Hee. Sending sunshine. *Peace. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you one and all....for tolerating me temper tantrums...and Marge, I swear I'm working on the attitude thing....I love you all....my humble grats, once again... |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Wonderful poem Serenity This was written far too close to the heart (((Hugs))) Rich |
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