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Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

0 posted 2000-08-15 07:40 PM

As sunlight fades and mothers call,
...to children on the lawn,
Evening's hush falls on the land,
...another day is gone.

First cooling breath of eventide,
...whispers to the night,
Awaken from your daytime slumber,
...illume now welkin's light.

Luna blooms in evening's glory,
...Venus ope's her eyes,
Orion starts his stately watch,
...as guardian of the skies.

Children to their dreams delivered,
...on wings of heaven's glow,
As comes the night at day's demise,
...to earth, her grace bestow.

Ensconced in bosom of the night,
...until first hint of dawn,
With the kiss of sun's fresh light,
...another night has gone.

[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 08-15-2000).]

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2000-08-15 07:48 PM

Jealousy rears her ugly head once again, Mike...gentle and thoughtful as a setting sun...and just as lovely...and yes, it flowed...darn it...gotta figure that out, lol...

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

2 posted 2000-08-15 08:20 PM

"illume" ... loved that.

This is as tender as the gentle closing of drowsy eyes. Again, such expertise with ink, my friend.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2000-08-15 09:04 PM

Mike--Lovely luna song, tender as a lullaby.

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

4 posted 2000-08-16 04:22 PM

Such a placid, visceral, inspiring piece of writing, my friend. I cannot think of a more peaceful commentary into night.

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Eloise
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since 1999-11-27

Posts 1096
Wyoming

5 posted 2000-08-16 04:26 PM

Great imagery in this lovely poem.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

6 posted 2000-08-16 06:05 PM

I LIKED THE READ!!!!!!!

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

7 posted 2000-08-16 06:54 PM

Yo Mike... enjoyed the read...Kudos!

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

8 posted 2000-08-16 07:07 PM

Excellent read very calming and peaceful... I enjoyed the atmosphere of the work so much... great writing!

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

9 posted 2000-08-16 09:53 PM

Very beautiful, Mike! I love it!

Denise

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

10 posted 2000-08-17 10:41 PM

reminds me of something I'd write, but never so beautifully

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

11 posted 2000-08-18 08:56 PM

Mike~
My stars ! How lovely !

'First cooling breath of eventide,
...whispers to the night,
Awaken from your daytime slumber,
...illume now welkin's light.'

You certainly do poeticize !
Your work is such a pleasure to read.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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