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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I'll find no comfort here tonight... in midst of prayer on darkened knee... I'll find no meaning in my life... I find no God. I find no me. and with one clever twist of tongue, I wish that you would make me young... a promise I was meant to be... I find no God. I find no me. To wish my birth would cease to be, and all that would be left of me--- gust of wind-- spray of sea... love that tremors, faithfully-- I could die-- and live--released. If that were all, I asked of me... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hey, girlfriend~ Ya' just gotta shake off that blue funk tonight !  Loving *hugs* coming your way ! *stunning poem, my friend* *Poof ! ... you'll always be young-at-heart ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
I'll find no comfort here tonight... in midst of prayer on darkened knee... -------- and all that would be left of me--- gust of wind-- spray of sea... love that tremors, faithfully-- I could die-- and live--released. -------- I loved those lines the best, though I loved the whole thing. I read it with shortened breath. Beautiful. .*.*.*.KrissiE.*.*.*. I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making you lose ur way I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel ~Touch and Go |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you Krissie...your reply made me smile... and Mom---I'm okay...I'll e ya later with the whole story as soon as I can stand to type the words, but I'm okay...and I love ya so much for your concern....Hugs---you are a beautiful spirit! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Some excellent lines contained with your poem. (me thinks maybe you ought to be giving lessons *smile*) enjoyed very much. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I find no God. I find no me. To wish my birth would cease to be, and all that would be left of me--- gust of wind-- spray of sea... love that tremors, faithfully-- I could die-- and live--released. If that were all, I asked of me... ===================== well that COULD NEVER be "all that is left" cause you are a poet... and a mom and a very special friend.. and i'll try to not lecture anymore and just say..im here and i loves ya me twin me |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You've got power and sadness in your pen Serenity.....and you let it flow with grace..Exquisite! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Serenity, you are truly a poet... |
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Bustem57 Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 98 |
I have felt that way sometimes and it isn't a good feeling. You have such command of the pen so keep writing and things will fall into place. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
I would love to say things will get better, and in fact they will BUT until that happens the heart has to feel what it feels and mend in it's own way. You write this beautifuly and it has left me in awe of the whole aoura surrounding it. I have felt this and you speak the truth. In my thoughts Jenn E |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I truely hope that writing this made the pain just a litte bit less. Your pen shares so well what you feel that it is impossible not to feel your pain and anguish for you. Lovely plea and the flow is so perfect. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks---I've been a little moody lately? but my gosh, m'dear balladeer, what a fine compliment, and Mike, geez...g'wan...I blush...and of course JM---I miss ya muchly. Smooches to all...and to all else, I'm off to read, pass back some these lovelies you've all been so generous with...thanks. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Serenity, One could not mean the existance of another's life. Life, as precious as it is, cannot be erased because we wish it to be. One love is but a portion of what life is and there are many kind s of love. Don't count any one more important than any other. Love is love no matter where it comes from. Enjoy in that which we do have. Rich |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Even though you're down in the dumps, you've written a wonderful poem. I hope you cheer up soon. Here's some big ((((((HUGS)))))) for ya! <*\\\>< The will of God will never lead you, where the grace of God cannot keep you. |
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